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Again great chapter. I'm looking forward to more!

Why do I get the feeling that Mallia will be having Mel's children? And is Ashun the same one from the sequel?

is mel an immortal or something?........... weird story.

Omigoooosh, Ashun~~~! XD That made my day, getting to read/see her again. Eeehehehe.

*cough* Seeing characters from previous stories in here has been making me fangirl.

To The People here who constantly ask about back-information. To help out a little to those who want to know more I made a list. I know this isn't the order Ayato did write them but I found out that this is the less confusing order to read them through: Partner, Sequel, aftermath
-To get more information on Una read; Beginnings, it is still in progress. And quite good, well, at least I like it^^
- To understand the Sidhe a little better and to understand the cultural rifts between Humans and Sidhe a little better too as also to get a hang on their background, read first; Tweak and than; Wilds Born.
- To understand better who Ayato and Rava ( The Two Lovers) are, read Namesakes. My absolute Favourite story of her next to Partner, by the way!
The actual review: Thank you for two updates in a row! =^.^=
Its shaping out nicely^^
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I liked this chapter, it gave many explanations to some questions open since the first chapters and even other stories too. It also made me want to kick the guide. He is mean and I think he needs to hone on his people skills a little more than just a little. Honestly, he practically did everything he could to alienate the two from the start. At least I do think that. growls at the Sidhe in question.
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a whispers job isn't an easy one, that's for certain and Mel has a knack for it too as it seems. However, I do not know what to think about this whisper for now, and his colouring is confusing me, wasn't P** black haired and green eyed? Since you didn't mention if he is human or Sidhe I got a little curios here...at least I thing you didn't^^!
Another thing, it makes now sense why these two where sent away, it makes me a little concerned about the good people left in their village, I can understand the punishing part of the others better too. And if Jarg is such a bad person for leaving ( which I can totally understand at this point, knowing now Jarg's background and such a little better) Why has he then 5 sons and 6 daughters who, are actually pretty healthy?? A lot questions that I hope you will answer soon^^

Okay, so Mel has issues. Many, many issues. I like this new Whisperer. He's good. And with him, you begin to see that the Whisper of a village is actually the sociologist, psychologist, and counselor. I understand that someone in Mel's village has been shirking his responsibilities in favor of sleeping around, but I am not sure which character that is. And I get the idea that the Whisperer (Mel's biological father) basically gave Mel to the Death Master as a concubine of sorts. At first I thought the Death Master was treating him as a son until I read that they were sleeping together. And it was not an abusive sexual relationship. Now, I understand that Mel did not even realize that he was a concubine to the Death Master. The other males of the village were so busy convincing him that he was the town whore that that was all he believed.

Excellent character development! Excellent plot development! Your writing style is classical and smooth; I really enjoy it. Great story! I hope there is a happy ending for Mel, Lou, and poor Tanis.

This chapter is funny. Mel and the psychiatrist (Whisper). I always assumed Mel would have some serious emotional issues being abandoned as he was. I can't wait for the conclusion of his psychiatric treatment(s).

Update soon!

I really like all the characters, and the story and the fact that it can be read without reading the rest. I've read the first with Mik and Paw, so I follow pretty well but at the same time it feels like I wouldn't have needed to read it to understand this. Which is good, or it would've been a bit confusing.

It's very different now in the world, the Sidhe and the people and very interesting how things have changed. I also quicky liked Mel, and Lou of course! and I'm most curious to see what happens.

Thank you for the quick paced update!
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I don't think you need a beta... as I said, I think your writing is fine this way! Just a little confusing at times. And obviously it would benefit from a quick once over to correct the odd grammar mistake and confusing sentence (who's story doesn't) but you said you're doing that which is really all I was getting at! This chapter for example was really clear - there are still things we don't know but I'm not confused! I feel like we'll figure everything out later as the plot develops. Like I said before, this is a great story and your writing is really good too. Just occasionally confusing which is why I was pointing it out. I didn't mean to sound insulting or anything of the sort; I was trying to give constructive criticism. And honestly if I didn't like your story or thought it was pointless I wouldn't have wasted my time reading or commenting :-) You've got great potential and so does this story!

Another great chapter(: