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I will be chewing my nails waiting for Smutty Sunday!!!! I am super happy chapter 10 will be longer than usual and hope you are already working on chapter 11 so you can get it posted sooner.

I am really hooked on this story but only because I know Brennan will one day have his freedom. I have to admire you're tenacity for attempting and doing a great job on writing about a subject like this.

I just hope Brennan continues to be held 'prisoner' by Al and Phil for some time before his 'release' and that there are many more chapters forthcoming. I have been pulled into the vortex of his new twisted world by reading what he is going through and keep waiting for what you have in store for him next!

I do look forward to the day he can recover what he has lost and hope Zack is part of that healing!

On a side note, I kind of hope that Phil and Al either get away or not killed by police or anything. I really don't know why, it's just that for some reason I do and know it's so very wrong of me! But again, if they did escape or something before getting caught then Brennan will always be wondering if they will show up again.

Oh well, I guess you PC is still giving you issues! I was hoping to see another new chapter up when I saw edited date on story yesterday and told myself you got your PC fixed but it must have been a glitch or something and you are still (unfortunately) have problems.

Have a very nice weekend and good luck with your PC and stuff.

I'm gonna pray for your PC... The waiting is killing me.

I have to say that I got really excited when I saw the edited date of 09/08/2011 so hope that means new chapter is forthcoming........

Please update soon!!!!!! I am dying to find out what Al and Phil are going to do with Brennan next and whether he will finally comply with their demands.

How are your computer issues coming along? I hope things start running more smoothly really soon!

Erm, might be pointless in saying this but I made a little grammar bobo on my review. I meant to say this "I don't know b/c they Phil and Al seem like the same "age." Okay, that's it...o.o...sry. Great story, AGAIN! :D

I think I have to agree with your new reviewer, A person, and the thought had passed my mind more than once that Phil might have abducted Al too. The only thing with that thought though is I kind of pictured the two of them being close in age so not sure about it even though it seems logical. I just saw an episode of CM that kind of reminded me of Brennan's kidnapping but it was a girl with an ipod that got grabbed and pulled into a van after giving instructions and she was jogging early in the morning. I hope you get to update this weekend. The waiting is really killing me. I hope your PC is behaving and glad you saved what you had already written of chapter 10.

Either way, have a nice Labor Day weekend!

er, I've never been on adult fanfiction...and so you're story was the first one I read...and I was like O.O...OHHH that's why this is..."adult" fanfiction. Haha...o.o....Um, well, I liked your story. :D It's very well written and I like your main character and I feel BAD for him. I like how you carry his emotions and the overall pace of the story isn't bad either. I also find Al a very interesting character. They way you portray him at times hes really rash but at others he obeys Phil like a little puppy, it kinda makes me think Phil might have kidnapped Al when he was younger. And now that Al is older now, they kidnap Brennan to fill his old spot. I don't know b/c they Phil and Al seem like the same...it's just a thought that occurred to me XD. You're characters make me think...so that's good! :D

The only thing that has been nagging me is this...in chapter seven, you say Phil and Al chose Brennan at random...and I dunno, something about that seems off. I think its unrealistic they would just see this kid and kidnap him w/o getting ANY source of information about him. I mean, it's fine they chose him at random but I mean was the first chapter where they met him or have they seen him before? I just think predators would take a lot more caution when they kidnap someone. I mean, for all they know, Brennan's family could like the world's top detectives or something and be able to find him pretty easily (Of course, I don't that's possible...but...I think you get the idea).

But again, you're story is like...awesome. And I will be going on this site now just to see if you updated or not XD

I am so sorry to hear about your PC problems from hell and hope things start getting better for you really soon.

I was wondering would you consider putting up some devian art (is that what you call it?) of Brennan and Phil and Al? It would be kind of cool to see something like that up.