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October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh man I cant wait till the update I just hope Brennan doesnt lose hope I hate it when people give up:(
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October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love your story, like super love, but I have ONE thing to say about it. UM, how can Breannan not know where he is? Now, hear me out, b/c if he's sitting in front of the TV most of the day.....there's gotta be local commercials on that advertising business in the area he's in. You see them all the time, even on the 24rs news network. I know he doesn't have much chance of escaping but Phil and Al need to stop letting him watch tv....>< lol
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October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
How does Phil know that the police won't trace him if he hacks into Brennan's Facebook page through his IP address? If the police are looking for Brennan, they might be following his FB account for suspicious activity and nab him and Al then rescue Brennan!
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October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh, I just noticed there is another reviewer named "Raven" maybe I should call myself Raven2!!! Just to let you know, I am a new reviewer of your story.
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September 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Omg o.o I just finished reading the story so far and I'm feeling so terrible for Brennan!!!! Phil is so much worse than Al ever was! And I'd thought he would be the one to soothe Brennan... Gah! I want more Dx Cuz I'm so worried about him I can't stand not knowing what's gonna happen next!!! Damn I wish I could write torture as well as you and traxie! You two are so brutal to your characters; I wish I had that kind of creativity to give my characters a more sympathetic edge XD Update soon!!!!
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September 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
this has to be the most violent fic I've ever read yet I can't help but keep reading...
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September 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am very disappointed that you haven't even commented on your panel how chap 11 is progessing and whether you will be posting it soon. I don't like the blog you have up. I checked that too but you didn't mention anything about updates on it either. I only saw one reviwer reply. I really hope you can find time to work on this soon.
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September 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
T_T Im reallllllllly sorry but I have NO idea how to respond to your tumblr posts! And you responded to my review! XD (btw, Im forgottenfigurehead on there!)
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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry, I had to delete my last comment and post again. The typos were making me twitch:
I just have to say, as brutal as this is, it's one of the best pieces of writing I've found on this site. There are a million stories about boys being kidnapped and raped--this is something different. Your entire approach is very smart. Brennan isn't passive, and he isn't immune to what's happening; he never stops looking for a way out and finds an opportunity in every situation. Likewise, for every potential escape, the antagonists have their bases realistically covered. Nowhere in the story did I feel like someone made a ridiculous, glaring error, and there are no stupid moments where the character failed to do something obvious. I love the focus on the mental struggle within Brennan and between himself and his captors, and I really appreciate that the story isn't about endless flowery rape where he ends up enjoying it and falling for one of the captors. As horrific as the violence is, the reactions to it are so believable. Brennan is sympathetic, and his captors are complex and interesting, just as they are vile. I'm very impressed. You could be a thriller/crime writer. I think you have the mindset for it.
If I could add one criticism, you might want to go back and scan some of your chapters for errors. There are several typos throughout, mostly involving name confusion, like Phil doing something and suddenly being called Al. But the little mistakes aren't enough to take away from the story.
I hadn't commented before, but I've been enjoying this since I found it a month or two ago. Keep up the good work. You're a gifted writer, and I trust that you'll play the entire story out well. Looking forward to your next update.
I just have to say, as brutal as this is, it's one of the best pieces of writing I've found on this site. There are a million stories about boys being kidnapped and raped--this is something different. Your entire approach is very smart. Brennan isn't passive, and he isn't immune to what's happening; he never stops looking for a way out and finds an opportunity in every situation. Likewise, for every potential escape, the antagonists have their bases realistically covered. Nowhere in the story did I feel like someone made a ridiculous, glaring error, and there are no stupid moments where the character failed to do something obvious. I love the focus on the mental struggle within Brennan and between himself and his captors, and I really appreciate that the story isn't about endless flowery rape where he ends up enjoying it and falling for one of the captors. As horrific as the violence is, the reactions to it are so believable. Brennan is sympathetic, and his captors are complex and interesting, just as they are vile. I'm very impressed. You could be a thriller/crime writer. I think you have the mindset for it.
If I could add one criticism, you might want to go back and scan some of your chapters for errors. There are several typos throughout, mostly involving name confusion, like Phil doing something and suddenly being called Al. But the little mistakes aren't enough to take away from the story.
I hadn't commented before, but I've been enjoying this since I found it a month or two ago. Keep up the good work. You're a gifted writer, and I trust that you'll play the entire story out well. Looking forward to your next update.
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September 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I noticed you deleted my last review so don't worry I won't bother you with questions anymore. I just wanted to know how your new BLOG worked and if it was free to use. If you want, you can delete this and all my reviews. I still like your story but won't worry you with my responses anymore. Good luck with your blog and your writing. I will still continue to read this story but not take the time anymore to review it.
Good luck and best wishes with your writing.
I think you are one of the best author's on this site,
dazedandconfused
Good luck and best wishes with your writing.
I think you are one of the best author's on this site,
dazedandconfused