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Holy shit O_O
OMG. I dearly hope the next chapter comes up soon. What suspense! I spent all day re-reading the whole story before i read the new chapter. xD hah. This story is intense!! *Bows down* You are the master. Haha my favorite story on this site by far. Ah my chest feels all tight, i wonder if this is when he gets out?(Window in the bathroom?) Or into a whole new world of pain? I wasn't expecting them to go ahead and brand him like that. I thought you were going to do something like have them go stay far away at like Richards place or something. Oh and i do feel bad for Jason, i hope he doesn't end up getting killed off. :'( He's so sad.
Hah though it's nice to see his captors nervous for a change.
~Hope your having a great day.
-A

Okay I've read this story a few times and I think it deserves a review for each chapter so hear goes. I'm reading it again and reviewing as I read.

Chapter One:

At the beginning I didn't know what to think. I knew he'd been upducted and wondered if his parents visit him a lot. I know it mentioned his mom was there once, when he blind-folded himself for a whole week, I was like.... Wait what? If I had been in his situation, that means had been abducted, I'd still be etchy and paranoid even locked up in my own apartment. I'd be to afraid to be blind.

then he started to recount his past and I was thinking Brennan you idiot, I wanted to cry because he was yanked into a van but I have to admit I do think Brennan had acted pretty stupidly. But then again I know how dark and evil people are (I watch the news to much LOL) And I would have been suspicous right from the start when he was reading the map from the wrong side of town. And then he puts the earbuds back in his ears. I might of helped but I would of put distance like walking opposite of the van. Oh and I would never EVER forget my cell. But then again like I said I watch too much news.

I felt so bad for him, but I think after all the talks of stranger danger in school he would have been a lot smarter. Yes I know it sounds like I'm being incredibly mean about Brennan by calling him a moron. That doesn't mean I agree with what those two guys did. Nothing gives someone the right to take another person and start messing with his life. From the instant I read this I felt bad and wanted Brennan to escape and maybe wise up a bit next time.

And to think crap like this actually happens. I really think that is what makes this story so terrifying is that each day there are people being kidnapped right of the street and it's scary to think that there are monsters like these that exist.

that was my critique on chapter one. I'm going to re-read chapter two and review :)

(to be honest I was afraid that this story wouldn't be continued. I really hope you finish it and not leave your characters hanging in a permenent libo. I really understand that it takes time to update. So just take your time but please finish the story.)

CrimsonWatersAlien

I am so afraid right now for both Brennan and Jason that I can't think straight. What an intense chapter especially when they were eating and Brennan looked up and saw the news story about him missing. I was reading the new reviews and actually don't think that Brennan is going to escape (at least not this time) because there is no way that he could get away from two let alone three physcopaths like Richard, Phil and Al. My heart goes out to Jason too and the three years of Hell he has been living in.

I really hope that you will consider writing another story featuring Jason (or a side one) to Waiting in the Throes also featuring Jason and his POV. Please don't let him die, he doesn't deserve that not after all he's been through. Let him end up being happy again. It is so pitiful to read how he (and now Brennan) are both thinking in terms of having no will to live anymore.

I dread reading the next chapter but know that I won't be able to stop myself from reading it.

(chapter two review)

OMG..... well I cried...again. No matter how many times I read this, there are just scenes that really tug on my heartstrings. It's like watching something that is so horrible that you want to look away but you can't help but read on. (if you understand that)LOL. I applauded Brennan when he tried to make his great escape from those Jailors. He was shoved down and had Al beating him up and I was like 'no don't do that to Brennan' kind of funny because my best friend asked who brennan was. I kind of talk to the computer, and movies. I know that's weird right?

Anyway then they took him in and did those things to him. (cringes) I could feel my stomach churn when Al said 'We're going all the way tonight' and the way you describe those characters. Made me cringe. I still think Brennan should have taking a dang cell-phone.

I will admit that I did feel quite sorry for Al when Brennan had bit him. *ouch* I mean that's a low blow but I won't say that he didn't deserve it, trying to suffocate Brennan to get what he wanted. That's just wrong. I was screaming at Al to get the F off Brennan as I read that terrible scene. I know he's heartless he couldn't even put lube on.... sheesh that's awful. And then waking his already bruised head against the headboard. They rip out his teeth, beat him up, and rape him. And that's just within the first day..... I can't stomach it. I felt extreamly ill after I've read this chapter. I guess that is because I'm a very empathetic person and you wrote this in first person which means were all seeing this through Brennan's eyes. That makes it worse and I actually feel violated after reading this. But I'm keeping to this story because I know he gets out and I want to see how someone can help him get over something as traumatic as this.

Peace

CrimsonWatersAlien

(3):

*bawls* What *inserts string of obscenities that would make sailors blush* I mean how could they hurt him like that? Then Phil has to act like Mr. El stupido that he doesn't understand why Brennan is hurt. I wanted to reach in through the computer screen choke Phill and rescue Brennan. I know exactly why the bastard wanted Brennan cleaned up. It wasn't to help him it was to freaking make sure Brennan was 'clean' enough. And he gives him those pills!

Although I must confess that I was surprised that Phil waited for Brennan to be awake before he did anything at all. And then they take him down to breakfast and Al is stupid enough to start making water for oatmeal....wait..what? Excuse me Al you stupid bastard, in case you don't remember. YOU RIPPED TWO OF HIS TEETH OUT! I felt sorry that they made him drink those nasty vanilla shakes. Ugh.... Gosh. They make me so mad! And Brennan makes me want to cry.

CrimsonWatersAlien

I can't take it anymore!!! I'm like an addict!!! I dreamt of this story last night. I'm starting to think I'm going insane.
Brennan ordeal really need to end quickly.

I was wondering if you are going to title the chapters like you mentioned something about and I think it was in your blog.

I know this must make me sound like a very bad person but I kind of hope that Brennan does get branded just like Jason. *** SLAP ME, PLEASE ****

I don't want Brennan to escape anytime soon and would like to see some sort of friendship form between him and Jason.

Finally a bit of hope maybe? Very interesting. I'll be watching for more :3 <3

Phil and Al really confuse me and I don't understand their messed up relationship. I would like to know how they met and became a 'couple' or 'housemates'. They really freak me out in a very scarey way.

I am really concerned for Brennan's welfare and health too.

Thanks for sharing this amazing story and it is quite an adventure almost like I am reading a suspense novel and can't stop turning the pages or reading the last chapter to find out what finally happens. I am happy Brennan knowing from first chapter that Brennan some day does get away. But, I am worried also about Jason!