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AAA I wanted him to escape in this chapter so much!! Booo guess I will have to wait a bit longer. I really don't like those two assholes at all ( this chapter was so heartbreaking). Good writing as usual.
I know Al and Phil won't die in this story but I still hope karma will get their asses (hard). Brennan has suffer far too much ( I need some hurt/comfort).

Wow. um, yeah. that's the word.
Your way of writing amaze me every time, it's amazing.
I think you've actually gotten Brennan to the point of no return in this chapter, at least you're very good at making your readers feel that way even though it is known that he gets away eventually, personally I can't wait for that momwnt to come already.

So.... I love your writing style, and the detail and imagery you add in is absolutely amazing! The story is written so very well, but... I just feel so depressed. I guess that is a good thing, because this is not supposed to be a fun loving story. I suppose inside I am a "Spielberg," where I want goodness and happiness to prevail even though I know that isn't reality. When I read your fic, I get very confused emotions: On one hand I just LOVE your writing, but then the plot itself makes me want to cry for Brennan. Will he get away? Will anyone save him? What's even worse, is that those type of organizations do exist, and my stomach actually turned as I was reading the dialogue between Bren and Phil. After each chapter, I feel as if I have to take a shower, and I end up having to watch an old family movie or watch a cartoon, so I can get happy. Please don't think I am bashing your fic, because I really am not; in a way the reactions I feel when I read your story is a compliment, because I only get that way when I read novels (esp. Stephen King). As an author, you make me connect to Bren in a very horrific way. This is probably the first fic I have EVER read on any website, where my mind, body, and emotions truly get involved in the story. Great job author. (cricket5144@hotmail.com)

I really was hoping someone would notice Brennan and possibly help him especially that guy in the bathroom who might recognize him on the news later, but hey who knows, perhaps it will be that frat boy who does.

This was another very intense chapter and all the conflicting emotions Brennan was going through was so terrifyingly real. Phil really knows exactly what to say and do to keep Brennan in line and under his control. I know what it feels like to be stuck by a needle and boy does it hurt. I stuck myself once with an empty but clean syringe that I was going to use on my dog to give her an insulin injection. I also bled like a stuck pig so I can only imagine how poor Brennan must have felt having Phil stick all the needle into him plus giving him a nipple ring, OUCH!!!!

I knew there was some sort of organization and that Richard/Phil/Al belonged to it!!!

I am so excited about Brennan meeting up with Jason again.

I am off to your tumblr page to ask another question.

Oh my gosh! Phil is mind controlling Brennan and using fear as a cataylst, isn't he? This chapter was so tense and I felt like I was right there in the SUV with them watching everything unfold. I was hoping that when Brennan cried out during the movie when all was quiet someone would have heard and investigated. It's like Phil is just twisting the screw deeper and deeper into Brennan but I liked how he kept hearing an inner voice telling him not to quit.

The way Phil threatened Brennan into believing someone would always be out there watching him scared the hell out of me.

I do wonder why Brennan didn't think to try and leave a note on some toilet paper or something (when he was alone in the bathroom without Al) but guess it's because he didn't have a pen, dah.

I am so happy you finally updated because I've been really stressing out,

Katie

I will never forget the time my parents took me and my brother and sisters to one of those movies when I was about 7 years old. We got attacked by mosquitoes and had to leave before the first movie was even over. It was awful but I shouldn't complain too much because it was even way worse for Brennan but boy did it bring back some awful memories. I was wondering is the guy in the bathroom part of the orginization that Phil mentioned to Brennan? Was he part of the test they were putting Brennan through? Then, I was wondering is that frat kid going to be in story again? Just curious and I will check your tumblr page for answers so hope you let me know cause it's driving me nuts. I was also wondering why no one thought it suspious that someone as young as Brennan was with an older guy like Al! It should have put up radar for some people especially mothers there with their own kids.

That. was torture.

I kept waiting for someone to recognize him, for Brennan to do something, anything.
But nothing happened.
You have my emotions going all over the place again. I'm beginning to think by the actual
time Brennan get's free I'm going to be all blasé.
It kills me that on tumblr you keep saying soon. Kills me.


My heart was literally beating out of my chest when Brennan called out "stop" at a quiet part in the movie, and the little
voice in my mind was chanting "please oh please let someone have heard that.noticed something, took down the license plate or something."

Phil, he's beginning to have me extremely unsettled. I hate it when he's alone with Brennan, and because Al seems to me, and I'll
hesitantly say this, that he's on Brennan's side, and because of that I'm always waiting for him to step in to be some sort of protection to Brennan against Phil. So, when he said nothing about Brennan and the needles..oh man. I felt so naive at that moment.
There's something about the way you play out the two bad guys that always has me thinking Al's the good guy. That he's more than he seems -like an undercover cop or something, it's like your coercing me into believing he's a "good" guy. (stop it~ D:)
But digression side, that scene where he (phil) was telling Brennan how there's an organization of people just like them -people who are always watching, made shivers go up my spine.
It's like a sinister Big Brother.

I don't think I'm ever going to feel comfortable at a drive in again.
Even though you were describing the drive in park, I couldn't stop thinking of the one I used to go to.
It was tucked in far away from the road, and surrounded by a small woods with fields on either side with a single rather unkempt gravel road
winding up to the single screen.
The concessions stand was in the middle of the lot, it was small and filled with pimply teenagers who looked like they wanted to work anywhere but there. The building itself was kind of old, with small bathrooms tucked off to the side of the building. The girls bathroom light always flickered a little, and made waiting there really eerie.
To conclude, basically it was a place I could imagine horrible things happening. I'd always sit in the car -mostly due to the mosquito's- but also
because all the drifting shadows and dark car windows and faceless people always made me feel like I was being watched. I just couldn't get 'my' drive in out of my head so my own fear of the drive in and Brennan's fear had my nerves on end the whole scene.

I'm excited at the prospect that we'll be seeing Jason again. Hopefully. (I got a bad feeling as I wrote that).

I kind of felt like my previous two reviews were lacking, so to make up for that you get an intensely long review. sorry.
I'll be waiting for the next chapter!
(I really like your Q&A on Tumblr by the way.:)

I felt sure that Brennan would have tried to make a run for it again but guess fear overtook him due to the numerous times he has tried and how it backfired rather painfully for him. I liked this but it was kind of nerve wracking for me. I am really looking forward to seeing Jason again and wonder how he's doing. I was wondering whether Jason and Richard will be in next chapter and want to know how soon you will be posting it. I love this story but it gives me nightmares.

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I don't know how I missed the fact that you updated.
But ohh that chapter was good!
I feel a little giddy because of the small time skip you did - things are moving along; it makes me feel like
"the end" is near for Brennan's time with Al and Phil. (My hopes are getting up again damnit)

I found some kind of delight initially when Al got angry with Phil, and I think I would like to see them fight a little more.
But then again that delight - as with all others so far - was short lived. When Brennan discovered Al's hard on after he punched him
all I could think was "oh. oh, he's one of 'those'", and I didn't know whether to be slightly relieved that both of them (for the most part) are
aggressors,or a little perturbed at the dynamic of Phil and Al's relationship.

I saw your Tumblr post regarding the "extreme weather" - and how fitting that I, being Canadian, didn't even notice the "extremity" or oddness of it-
but I would like to ask is Waiting in the Throes set in Canada? If so where? :)

I will now be watching Tumblr like a hawk for update info!
Great as always :)

I just realized after reading chapter 17 that you seem to be not focusing so much on real-time for Brennan but everything seems to be moving much faster or jumping forward in time for him. I have to confess that at times I found it a tiny bit confusing with some parts especially when one paragraph featured Phil/Brennan then the next jumped to Al/Brennan and I had to go back and read it again to be sure what happened. Wow, Al and Phil have some major issues and seem to be getting more dangerous as each day passes of Brennan's imprisonment. All in all, my heart goes out to Brennan and what happens next chapter.