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for Waiting in the Throes

by MaddoxGrey

person iriskzk1
schedule June 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Just finished reading Wicked Games and all I can say is Holy Crap. That chapter was intense.
person Samantha
schedule June 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is a pretty amazing story and I'm absolutely hooked. I never knew that I could get so enthralled by something so dark and wicked, but I have. You have an amazing talent and I can't wait for the next chapter, although I just recently discovered this and have been reading all of the chapters in just one go. Well done and I can not wait for more.
person Diane
schedule June 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I recently came across this story and have to admit that even though this is a very dark subject, I am enjoying the story. The author has really done a wonderful job of developing the characters. You can see how Brennnan is slowly being broken to the point where he won't really care what happens to him. I like the way that the author leads his readers in their feelings about Phil and Al. I'm sure that I'm not the only one who thought that Al would turn out to be the one who was kinder to Brennan and Phil remain the nastier of the two of them. Then, of course, it turns out that Phil is by far one of the most sadistic characters that I have ever read about. And Al really isn't much better, because he stands by and eventually,pretty much goes along with whatever Phil wants to do to Brennan. This story is fiction, but it seems that it could easily have really happened, other than that some of the things done to Brennan might have(I think) actually killed him, especially in the time span in which they seemed to have happened. I look forward to reading the subsequent chapters as they become available.
schedule June 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Somehow you manage to make me feel apprehensive every time you update and yet every time I read it. I am still hoping,praying and wishing for him to get out and perhaps even dreaming that Al will grow a conscience suddenly, Phil I have given up on though.

It is just interesting how you manage to make me feel these conflicting feelings and yet I cannot resist reading more. Hope to see more soon (and I little bit I fear it)
person Anon
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Gosh! The whole time I was like, "Just fucking tell someone! They might think you are crazy at first, but if you persist they will believe you! Or lie. Do SOMETHING" And then him giving up was just... :( I don't know. Depressing I guess.

I love your story. So beautiful. In a super creepy, never would want this to happen to me kind of way. :)
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I gotta say, I think this was my favorite chapter so far. Phil with those needles in the beginning though, omg, non-consensual acupuncture kink, who does that!! I wish we could've seen Phil and Al's conference on debating boundaries with Brennan because I want to know what they are, but I guess we, like Brennan, are kept in the dark about it. Al must just get massively turned off by lack of pubic hair - of all the things he ought to be stopping Phil from doing, he picks the one that's not physical torture? thanks, Al.

Since I'm really interested in Phil and Al, it was kind of interesting to hear Al hint a little at their age (assuming they're the same age?). They've been together ten years, makes me wonder what other illegal endeavors, particularly of the rape sort, they've committed together before. I doubt Brennan is their first rape, though it seems like he's their first "slave". Al once indicated that if Phil didn't listen to him, he wouldn't "share anymore". Yet last chapter he also claimed they were equals. I had thought maybe Al was Phil's hookup into this "organization" thing and so he was by default the one in charge, but I don't know. Al seems to be more attached to Brennan than Phil does, at any rate. Al at least makes a motion of caring about Brennan (it was his idea to take him to the movie, right? even if there were some ulterior motives in testing him in public, I feel like in a twisted way Al really did want to do something for him). Phil hasn't really shown Brennan any sort of attention that's not of the torture kind since before the barn, with a few very, very brief exceptions.

And the movie, omg. It was really heart-wrenching because I was there with Brennan, suddenly unable to find the words to get anyone's attention. I totally found that realistic. I haven't decided yet if Phil told those things to Brennan just to freak him out and make him too afraid to try anything, or if it was actually true that there are a lot of guys out there that could go after him. But I'm definitely sure that they would let Brennan out in public without a plan B and a plan C, and relying on Brennan to be too paranoid seems a bit messy. Brennan said he felt like someone was watching him, I wonder if that was true? I also wonder why Phil stayed home. To make it look like a date between Al and Brennan? I thought maybe Phil secretly followed along just in case. Also, when Al suddenly left Brennan in the restroom, I wondered if it was to go beat up that frat boy. lol am I right?
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I though it was quite clear that Phil was a sadist... Wasn't so clear about Al until today. Masochist.
*sighs* To be caught in between two. Why can't these idiots just go to a bdsm club or something, why go through the trouble of kidnap?
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This feels like another story I've read. about kidnap.
it ended with the kidnapper getting caught, years years later...
but that kidnapper acted alone.
not 'organization'... freaking organization. gods.... help him.

is this ending yet? are you gonna torture him somemore? O_Q why am I even reading this angst? there is like, NO light in the future... but shit man - once you start something (for me at least) I just have to finish it.... gaaaaaaaaaaaaahh!!!

PLEASE! stop this tension! I dunno! Do something!!! something drastic that would change the direction of the plot and give us readers something to enclose around! there is like nothing, no 'something' to hope for.

"Escape" feels like a .... yes. no no no. yes? no! thing

"Retaliation" feels like a .... stop no more, don't. dont dont dont.

"Hope" feels like a bucket of water, quarter filled, with a dozen cracks dripping water out like rain.

"Death" feels like a blessing awaiting to happen. and-

"Rescue" feels like a lost call.

It's like... What do we have to hold on to anymore at this point?! O_Q

ps: I cannot. CANNOT believe Al did NOTHING! when he saw brennan in the tub, bleeding. HE DID NOTHING?! I had some hope for him, for a bit, a tiny bit. ITS GONE! I'm so STUPID to think Al was better than that. stupid!
and Phil is just plain old sick psycho fucker. Mind fuck. Rape fuck. HE fuckes freaking everything that. Aaaaaaarrrrrrrgghh!!!! Just kill them already!!! So angry, and so sad and sooo feeling hopelessly hopeless!

*sighs*

please update. I need to know how this ends and have some freaking closure for all the trauma...

Your distressed reader,
Nekoii
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I saw some other reviewers mention a 'hope that Brennan had called out for help during the movie-date-shit'...
but. Phil is a sadistic - smart - bastard. HE instilled fear. and it's a mind game he won, for now at least... It works you know, these mind games, these 'installations' of fear.
It's... not nice... at all.
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... coz you really feel that there is that 'force' controlling you, keeping you in line... and you just simply, DON'T DARE to do it. you get paranoid. very very paranoid. and it's very stressful, that it's just so much more easier to obey, and go with the hell you are familiar with. rather than the hell you would end up in lest you get caught.... lest you get caught. always thinking "What will happen if I get caught", it rolls in your mind the even MORE terrifying things that could happen, and you lose what ever guts you had, all courage lost, paranoia increases tenfold and in the end, you've got no more time. It serious, seriously no TIME. and then you have to go because if you're late then that's bad too.... Gah, damnit, I know how that fear feels... Brennan, especially taking into account how 'normal' his life had been prior to all this shit, this big an impact on his psych and all the trauma he has been through. the threats. punishments. warnings. punishments... it's all just a perfect receipe for Phil to play his mindgames. so there. I did NOT expect him to DO anything... I was, hoping as hell, that someone he knew would recognize him............................... fat chance. life aint that nice n easy.

Okay that being said. I'll give you credit here (because you know, I tend to 'praise' an author less, when said author does something unpleasant) but that does'nt mean you don't write good, it means you write too good it makes people BE that 'depressed' and 'loss of hope' when the character is feeling that too. Kudos to your play on emotions and Phil's mind fuckery. And Al's continual two-faced hypocrite role... They're a combination of disaster. It's gonna take something big for a happy ending in this one.
person S.Rida
schedule June 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Gosh. i cant take much more of this.... When does Brennan get rescued!!!! i think he isnt completely broken but very close to it..... I'm a sucker for happy endings