rate_review Reviews

This story is very well written. I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.

Maddox, check this link out - http://www1.whdh.com/news/articles/local/12008726003542/search-continues-for-missing-boston-student/ (It kind of reminds me of when Brennan saw the news story on tv about himself.)I tried to put it up on your tumblr page but it wouldn't let me so I thought I would post it here for you. I will check back on tumblr later today to see if you took a look at it.

Maddox!~

How often to I begin my reviews with a wail of your name? I'm sure the effect is lost in text, but some how just that one word encapsulates all that you make me feel in one chapter.
It's my cry of happiness and despair of another chapter done and read.

I think, personally, that this was one of your best chapters written. There were so many times where I just had to pause and absorb and relish in the macabre beauty of your writing.
"The second his hand touched mine it burned hot and white, like fire, like the brand and every part of me screamed to pull away. Because up until now, the last few months could have been one long, horrible, twisted nightmare. Up until now, I could have been dead, in some sort of bizarre state of limbo waiting for the random appearance of heaven’s gates or hell’s fiery pits. His fingers scorched me as the delusion I hadn’t even realized I’d held burned away. I could hear a strangled, pitiful sound, and though I didn’t feel it, I knew it came from me, because seconds later, I erupted into body wracking, loud, uncontrollable sobs, and I grabbed my brother’s arm, fingers digging into the soft sweater like he was a life preserver in the middle of the ocean, and then I was floating away."

This paragraph here just stunned me. I had to re-read it over and over again until I was sure that I hadn't missed a single word, a feeling described.
Your description, metaphors - just everything you used to describe Brennan's brutal reconnection with reality is just top notch.
I love the way you describe his denial of the events, and how the simple touch from his brother grounds him so completely to the life he once had and the life that he has now. Really beautiful!

'“You look like you survived hell,” Matt finally said, and growing impatient I finally blurted the first thing on my mind.
“That’s because I did!”'

I don't think I need to explain how awesome, encompassing and true this line is. There really is no other way to describe what Brennan went through.
For some reason as I read Brennan's exclamation thought of a line from Milton's 'Paradise Lost': "The mind is it's own place and in itself Can make a Heaven of Hell and a Hell of Heaven."
Reading it with that line in mind I really considered how it would apply to Brennan.
Yes, what he went through was undeniably hell on earth for him. But even though he has escaped physically from that place, mentally it is still with him, leaving him basically unable to trust the world that should, by all rights, be a comfort - a heaven - for him.

Well, before I stop rambling I must address one issue: What happened to Jason?
Something in the way you wrote about him in the chapter left me with a seed of doubt growing.
Not that anything necessarily bad happened to him, but more so -- he didn't get to the police, he didn't tell them about Brennan.
So many questions!

Looking forward to chapter 24!~ :)

I tried to like this, but 15 chapters of torture is way too much. I think you could have accomplished your point in a lot less.

As far as I am concerned, this has had to be one of the best chapters to date and I sincerely mean that. It's been such a long rough stretch for Brennan but now he is at a new fork in the road on his quest to healing. I am glad he's finally safe and with his family. I went through all kinds of deep emotion while reading it and felt like I was seeing and feeling everything from Brennan's eyes. So, another well done work of writing.

I just found this story on Goodreads. It is a great story, if very dark and hard to read :) I am so happy to see that you are still working on it. This story brought out so many emotions in me, fear, sorrow, anger, disbelief, and just plain panic! I hope that Jason and Brennon find their happily ever after. I just thought I would point out that a certain police officer could possibly be strong enough to keep the Origination away from brennon.........hint hint ;)

Oh gawd, I know I wanted to read this chapter but didn't know it would make me so sad to the point I was crying like a sob right til the end. Something tells me that the next chapter with Brennan's parents (I think) will be just as tearful. If it was this bad for us I can't even think how you handled writing it.

I was so happy when I saw the note on your tumblr page you would be updating this week but sorry to hear you were sick. Get well soon. I was so hyped up to read this chapter and meet Matt and it did not disappoint me. It made me cry and laugh which I think is a good thing. I just wish I could keep clicking the next chapter link and read more. I did get upset with Matt for kind of being demanding of Brennan about being raped but will give him a break because I know it's due to frustration that this has happened to his kid brother and he wasn't able to have done anything to stop it or protect him since he is the older and protective big brother.

It's my birthday today and I got the greatest gift ever by seeing you had updated and it's even better than a chocolate with cream cheese frosting birthday cake. I have to admit I did kind of sob while reading it especially at Brennan's reunion with Matt, that really hit my heartstring in a bad yet good way depending how you look at it. I was a tiny bit frustrated with Matt especially since he's a nurse and works in a hosptial that he wasn't more considerate of Brennan's feelings. I guess it was just the timing of everything and the fact that he was sort of in shock at seeing the bad condition Brennnan was in that he just couldn't fanthom it. I hope you can surprise us with another update soon.

I actually read this when it first started and kept up with it but around chapter 17 or something it became too much for me without the promise of relief. I felt like I was reading torture porn and that didn't sit well with me. I read some of the reviews after the latest chapter came out that made me pick it up from where I left off. I'm glad I did. Having to go through hell TWICE with Brennan really gave me such a feeling of relief and victory and sadness when he finally got saved. I'm really enjoying the realism of this fic and I want to see how Brennan copes after this. Or doesn't cope as the case may be. I, also, want to see Brennan happy and learning to love again. I just can't wait. It's long over due. Please, please update soon!!!