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I can't tell you how much it breaks my heart to read this story, but so happy that you aren't candy coating the trauma, and the aftermath.

Hello Maddox, from now on I am going to stop asking questions on tumblr because I don't want to make you feel bad or anything, but will still read all the comments so I will know what's going on. I will just review and comment here from now on. Thanks for updating! I did't mean to be one of those people who were making demands on you to update so again apologize and hope you can forgive me for causing you any unneccessary stress. I cried my heart out reading this chapter and ran out of kleenex! I felt so sorry for Brennan's poor mom but did laugh once when she told Brennan how she gave Matt a black eye that was priceless. I think that Brennan, Matt and their Mom and Dad should probably go to family group counseling sessions together to help them all cope better. I really admire Dr. Carson for the way he is helping Brennan and am glad he ended up being Brennan's doctor that night he arrived at the hospital. At least the police are taking the threat of Phil and Al seriously enough to keep him out of the press and hiding his identity from them. I wish Brennan hadn't hurt his Mom like that it was pretty brutal of him to do but once he got going he couldn't seem to stop. I think he needed to do it though because it means he's starting the healing process by not keeping everything in. The part at the very end with his Dad really got to me.

Well, what can I say? Another really awesome chapter! I knew this chapter would be extremely touching and was not disappointed. I couldn’t help tearing up when Brennan said that he wanted to see his mother. And I couldn’t help but feel her emotional pain when Brennan flinched away from her when she went to hug her son for the first time in many months. She kept it together though and had to herself with holding his hand and then washing his hair as she once did when he was a child. I also felt her distress when Brennan spoke so vociferously of the Brennan she knew being dead. This seemed to be really harsh, but it is reality to Brennan.
I also loved the part where his father, the last one to see him, was waiting in his room when Brennan woke up. Initially, I think Brennan was a bit fearful of the shadowy figure who turned out to be his Dad. But his father made it all okay when he came over and kissed Brennan on the brow and told him that he was loved unconditionally. Just beautiful writing here !
I thought Nurse Louise was just perfect. What a sweetheart! I was glad to hear that Dawn will face some repercussions over her lack of ethics. And I think Matt is in the doghouse with his parents right now. I hope Matt will be as accepting of Brennan as Brennan thought Matt would be.
I’m glad that the police decided to move Brennan’s room and give him a fictitious name as a precaution, since the media will probably soon be telling the identity of the John Doe that was found in New Canaan. Brennan’s fear over this was quite palpable. I look forward to seeing how everything pans out.

You totally had me bawling my eyes out with this chapter. It's gonna take a long time and a lot of therapy for things to get even remotely back to normal with Brennan and his family. I wonder what's happened to Jason? And if Phil & Al had all of Brennan's details (address and family info), what's to stop them coming after him or his family later on?? It doesn't seem like they'll let things go so easily. Update again soon!! XD

Maddox, Maddox, Maddox...... I am running out of kleenex, LOL. What can I say about this chapter? I felt like Brennan was yelling at me instead of his mother whom I wanted to hug and comfort... the poor thing. It's a wonder she's not sick with all the worrying she's been going through. I wanted to slap Brennan or throw cold water in his face for acting that way with his mom but wouldn't have the heart to do it even though I think he would deserve it. I think he was using her as his 'punching bag' because she would be the one who wouldn't strike back at him. Well, I hope Dawn aka Ducky doesn't blame Brennan for what happened to her but she must have expected something like that to happen. I kind of wish Phil or Al would make a move on Brennan just so they would get caught. I think Brennan kind of resented the fact that his family, Dr. Carson and the police were discussing him and it made him feel even more violated. I can't describe how the ending affected me when Brennan woke up and his dad told him that he loved him no matter what. You are seriously killing me Maddox, my heart can't take much more of this angst. I am going to be watching your tumblr page in the next couple of days so expect me to be asking questions about this latest update. ~ Katie ~

(chap20) I'm going to throw up...

(btw do pardon the non-logged in. aff is not allowing me to log in for some reason or other... tecnhical issues. bah.)

chapter 20

He can laugh. he's nuts. that's it. nuts.

and in five point seven minutes.... how far could you have gone in five point seven minutes...
if you ran... you could have gone... how far?

around 13seconds to run a 100 meters.
maybe 30seconds if you walk fast.
but Jason would run. He'd run even if he had to run on a broken leg...
but he'd still not be that fast...
so 30seonds.
30 seconds, for a 100 meters.
how far could you get in five point seven minutes... in three hundred and forty two seconds....
you could go for 1140 meters... but that's ideal.
this is not ideal.
i'd be thanking my lucky stars if Jason could have even got ONE kilometer away. but in the vast plain nothingness surrounding that house.... what.. what what!?!??!?!??! WAAAAAAAAAAATHTHTH!?
shit man shit!

this is ... this is the make it, or break it.
we're either gonna be seing a happy ending... or a shit assed dead ending... in a few chapters time.
this is chapter 20.
i see you've got up till 23 up so far... we'll see...
im on it.

chapter 21
Well....

that was quite the horror HORROR GORE HORROR film.
I'm most definately going to be paranoid when I head back home after a night lecture... very. very paranoid.

but somehow, the chapter titles spoiler'ed me i think. especially with your last paragraph after the 'death-by-stabs'...

i... can't think of anything else constructive to say. so next chapter i'll read.

chapter. 22

oh my god. you did what i've been begging you to do....
you ended it all....
im in disbelief right now.
im waiting for the moment he wakes up and this is all some severe hallucination...
but... well.....

back to the statistics.
September 21st. 0032AM

minus the 8/9 days of unconsiousness
September 12th?
Since april something, till september 12...
5 months? or four. seeing as to he counts the anniversaries.
and there were 3 of them. there were three right?
i think so.
so four months give or take.

Four months..... really? REALLY?

it felt like much more.

and what of JASON... jason jason jason..........
I hope some hospital elsewhere has him safe.

but,... BUT... we have to know how they finally FOUND Brennnan. in that god forsaken place.

did Al tell.?

did Jason tell?

the drama continues...

wow... wow... well after such an intense kidnap and 'going through hell' multitude of chapters.
it would have been a too-sudden-stop for everything to just 'end'.
your plot flow, and planning... is really really impressive...

that leaves me to guess, if your attention to detail, and your meticulous-ness is to continue till the end like a properly, neat, complete piece of literary work
im guessing, estimating, another 7 chapters? 10? anoter 5 more chapters at the very least before this wraps up.

not that im not enjoying this, as much as someone enjoys sadistic stories... but i mean, it's a GOOD read.
but. you still get that feeling of "I just want it all to end" since we're all wrapped up in Brennan's POV.
that feeling will persist. hopefully, NOT in suicide.

I've read some terrible torture stories (they were well written, the torture was horrible but) that pulled up and ended very nicely. happy endings...

are you going to give us a happy ending too?
I'll be here, waiting to see~