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November 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I never have much time to leave more thoughtful reviews, but I just wanted to say that this chapter was awesome (as they all are). I am so glad that he's been reunited with his family. The last scene with his father was heartwarming. I think I may have cried quite a few times while reading this chapter. I cannot wait for more. He's obviously got a long road to recovery (as the first chapter clearly shows) and I can't wait for it. After the first half of this story, I'm ready for some hope and change (sorry, remnants of election season). Keep up the fantastic job!
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November 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
In some ways, I admit, I enjoyed the story but unfortunately, I have more criticisms than praise. My praise is that you are a really good writer and you have an amazing way of setting the scene. Which is why I kind of forced myself to sit through this because I am super picky and it's hard to find authors I potentially enjoy. Unfortunately, the story kind of wore on me as it went on.
It had a very intriguing start and I am severely not a fan of abuse due to how it is produced in yaoi but this was chilling and really had me intrigued in the beginning. Unfortunately, the chapters became more gruesome in the same way that it became redundant. The story kind of lost its chilling edge and it became chapters and chapters of sex and abuse. There were interesting aspects that kept me here. When he tried to escape and when he helped his friend escape were the most memorable among the sea of abuse. Very suspenseful and had me telling him to get away, but also he kept getting caught and lo and behold, more punishment and abused. The problem here is you become a little detached from the story in that you no longer find it chilling.
In some moments, I found myself wishing that the next chapter would be different but it wasn't which unfortunately had me fast forwarding. I admit I skipped a few chapters because it was wearing on me. My biggest gripe with this is because of the conclusion. It concluded a little too easily and conveniently. Where is the healing and the recuperating process? Where's the trauma? He was rescued, put in a hospital and it just ended there. I wish some chapters were donated to the end. To be honest, I finished this to see if he actually died. That was another reason, I made myself kind of switch towards the end. But since, he lived, I would have liked to see some form of healing here. funcrip
It had a very intriguing start and I am severely not a fan of abuse due to how it is produced in yaoi but this was chilling and really had me intrigued in the beginning. Unfortunately, the chapters became more gruesome in the same way that it became redundant. The story kind of lost its chilling edge and it became chapters and chapters of sex and abuse. There were interesting aspects that kept me here. When he tried to escape and when he helped his friend escape were the most memorable among the sea of abuse. Very suspenseful and had me telling him to get away, but also he kept getting caught and lo and behold, more punishment and abused. The problem here is you become a little detached from the story in that you no longer find it chilling.
In some moments, I found myself wishing that the next chapter would be different but it wasn't which unfortunately had me fast forwarding. I admit I skipped a few chapters because it was wearing on me. My biggest gripe with this is because of the conclusion. It concluded a little too easily and conveniently. Where is the healing and the recuperating process? Where's the trauma? He was rescued, put in a hospital and it just ended there. I wish some chapters were donated to the end. To be honest, I finished this to see if he actually died. That was another reason, I made myself kind of switch towards the end. But since, he lived, I would have liked to see some form of healing here. funcrip
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November 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
First, I read your blog, and sorry to hear some of your reviewers are acting so entitled. Honestly, I'd suggest from now on not responding at all to any "question" that asks when you will update or asks for an early update, just ignore it. For that matter, I wish you'd ignore "questions" that ask for blatant spoilers, too (i.e. what chapter is Brennan's love interest going to be introduced?!)... just because anyone who doesn't realize you're not going to answer that hasn't been paying attention, and it's kind of annoying to scroll through so many of those when I just want to read answers to the interesting questions, lol. It's your call of course, guess it's one of the down sides of being a popular web author! :)
Onto the chapter... wow, has it only been a day? For some reason I thought more time had passed than that, maybe two days, but that's probably because Brennan's done so much sleeping/passing out. Jesus, Brennan's got a lot to process for only 24 hours. I feel bad for Ducky, hopefully since Brennan gave her permission to do it, and as she said, she "technically" didn't break any rules she'll get off light. I also felt bad for Brennan's mother. We're hearing more dialogue from Brennan than we ever really have, and aside from Jason, we haven't really heard him speak without reservation, naturally. Unfortunately, as unique as his outburst as his mother was, it was so sad. If I were his mother, I'm not sure if I'd be able to control myself, I'd want to grab him and hold him, too. It kind of surprised me that he responded better to his father than his mother, I thought his mother might be a "safe" figure, plus she's a woman, but I guess any abrupt movements are going to freak him out. Poor Matt with his black eye. Maybe next chapter Brennan will be up for a full family reunion, and also able to discuss where things go from here.
Police are guarding his room... scary. I wonder if Phil and Al will really go after him, by this point, it would only be for their personal satisfaction. He's already given their names and descriptions to the police, though I guess if they took him out he couldn't testify against them if they were ever caught, but I imagine he'll be able to give enough detail to the police where even that won't help them. Phil and Al might be better off just staying far away from Brennan. I wondered the same about Jason, and noticed that Rich didn't seem to be going after him again. Actually, speaking of Jason, I was surprised that the police in charge of Brennan's case hadn't heard about Jason(or..?). If Jason were successful, and went to the police, he would have definitely told them about Brennan (he knows his full name and hometown) and the appropriate police would have been notified. If Jason did tell and the police had heard, Brennan's case wouldn't have been cold for a couple weeks. Anyway, I'd guess Brennan would be safe in the hospital anyway, considering cameras and security even without the police. But if Phil/Al and the Organization (we know about at least six members and at very least four victims, more have been insinuated so I guess it's real) have the means to hire someone else to take out Brennan, I don't know. At any rate, it's possible they don't even know he's alive yet, but they will eventually, and they know where his family lives, soooo I hope the Sullivan family gets in touch with their real estate agent soon. (though to be honest, my current theory is that Al will see Phil's tape, freak the fuck out, and then find out Brennan's alive and try to abduct him again instead of kill him, and Phil will either try to kill Brennan first or help Al abduct him by way of apology but who knows, besides you, lol)
Also, pertaining to answers from your blog, there's been some speculation about why Phil and Al acted differently in the beginning of the story and what their motivations were. I know you said they were just putting on an act for each other but - forgive me, mea culpa, dissent is only coming from me being your fan - I can't quite buy it. I know, Word of God and all, but that explanation just doesn't sit with me, because Phil and Al act the way they do even when they are alone with Brennan. Al honestly comes across to me at the beginning as an punch/rape-first-questions-later oaf, and if it was an act, I'm not sure why he acted so stupidly. I was very willing to accept Al's previous explanation that he was "too excited" - I can definitely see that, and how after a few days the fantasy becomes a reality with Brennan living with them, and he grew attached thereafter. Conversely, Phil seems, I don't know. I get it, he's sadistic and borderline sociopathic, but he's merciful to Brennan when he doesn't have to be, when Al's not there. Giving him painkillers, stopping and slowing down the night of the thunderstorm, "softening" his expression when he tells Brennan he won't kill him (lie or not, I thought he might have meant it at the time), trying to relax Brennan and guide him the first time he raped him and swearing when he realized Brennan's bleeding.. this isn't meant to be a list of redeeming factors in Phil or anything, I don't need any convincing that he's scum, it just seems like these things aren't meant to placate Al but, I don't know, maybe manipulating Brennan's emotions and fragile state to make him accept his new life at worst, maybe possibly having some microscopic element of concern for Brennan, too. Which doesn't amount to much, but he occasionally has those "human" moments even after the barn. I guess you'll disagree with this, that's okay, haha, it wouldn't be the first time my head!canon differed from real!canon.
Sorry for long-ness, I don't know how it all comes out. ;-; Thanks for sticking with this story, I love reading updates!
Onto the chapter... wow, has it only been a day? For some reason I thought more time had passed than that, maybe two days, but that's probably because Brennan's done so much sleeping/passing out. Jesus, Brennan's got a lot to process for only 24 hours. I feel bad for Ducky, hopefully since Brennan gave her permission to do it, and as she said, she "technically" didn't break any rules she'll get off light. I also felt bad for Brennan's mother. We're hearing more dialogue from Brennan than we ever really have, and aside from Jason, we haven't really heard him speak without reservation, naturally. Unfortunately, as unique as his outburst as his mother was, it was so sad. If I were his mother, I'm not sure if I'd be able to control myself, I'd want to grab him and hold him, too. It kind of surprised me that he responded better to his father than his mother, I thought his mother might be a "safe" figure, plus she's a woman, but I guess any abrupt movements are going to freak him out. Poor Matt with his black eye. Maybe next chapter Brennan will be up for a full family reunion, and also able to discuss where things go from here.
Police are guarding his room... scary. I wonder if Phil and Al will really go after him, by this point, it would only be for their personal satisfaction. He's already given their names and descriptions to the police, though I guess if they took him out he couldn't testify against them if they were ever caught, but I imagine he'll be able to give enough detail to the police where even that won't help them. Phil and Al might be better off just staying far away from Brennan. I wondered the same about Jason, and noticed that Rich didn't seem to be going after him again. Actually, speaking of Jason, I was surprised that the police in charge of Brennan's case hadn't heard about Jason(or..?). If Jason were successful, and went to the police, he would have definitely told them about Brennan (he knows his full name and hometown) and the appropriate police would have been notified. If Jason did tell and the police had heard, Brennan's case wouldn't have been cold for a couple weeks. Anyway, I'd guess Brennan would be safe in the hospital anyway, considering cameras and security even without the police. But if Phil/Al and the Organization (we know about at least six members and at very least four victims, more have been insinuated so I guess it's real) have the means to hire someone else to take out Brennan, I don't know. At any rate, it's possible they don't even know he's alive yet, but they will eventually, and they know where his family lives, soooo I hope the Sullivan family gets in touch with their real estate agent soon. (though to be honest, my current theory is that Al will see Phil's tape, freak the fuck out, and then find out Brennan's alive and try to abduct him again instead of kill him, and Phil will either try to kill Brennan first or help Al abduct him by way of apology but who knows, besides you, lol)
Also, pertaining to answers from your blog, there's been some speculation about why Phil and Al acted differently in the beginning of the story and what their motivations were. I know you said they were just putting on an act for each other but - forgive me, mea culpa, dissent is only coming from me being your fan - I can't quite buy it. I know, Word of God and all, but that explanation just doesn't sit with me, because Phil and Al act the way they do even when they are alone with Brennan. Al honestly comes across to me at the beginning as an punch/rape-first-questions-later oaf, and if it was an act, I'm not sure why he acted so stupidly. I was very willing to accept Al's previous explanation that he was "too excited" - I can definitely see that, and how after a few days the fantasy becomes a reality with Brennan living with them, and he grew attached thereafter. Conversely, Phil seems, I don't know. I get it, he's sadistic and borderline sociopathic, but he's merciful to Brennan when he doesn't have to be, when Al's not there. Giving him painkillers, stopping and slowing down the night of the thunderstorm, "softening" his expression when he tells Brennan he won't kill him (lie or not, I thought he might have meant it at the time), trying to relax Brennan and guide him the first time he raped him and swearing when he realized Brennan's bleeding.. this isn't meant to be a list of redeeming factors in Phil or anything, I don't need any convincing that he's scum, it just seems like these things aren't meant to placate Al but, I don't know, maybe manipulating Brennan's emotions and fragile state to make him accept his new life at worst, maybe possibly having some microscopic element of concern for Brennan, too. Which doesn't amount to much, but he occasionally has those "human" moments even after the barn. I guess you'll disagree with this, that's okay, haha, it wouldn't be the first time my head!canon differed from real!canon.
Sorry for long-ness, I don't know how it all comes out. ;-; Thanks for sticking with this story, I love reading updates!
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November 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I was so looking forward to reading this chapter and finding out how Brennan's reunion with his parents played out that I should have been more prepared by how much I was going to cry reading it. Oh my gosh! I was bawling my eyes out - more I think for Brennan's mom this time than for Brennan. Why was he so mean to her? Oh, and another thing I hope you can explain to me is why Brennan reached out more to Matt and his Dad than he did to his mom? He barely touched her hand and then yelled at her and yet in previous chapter he grabbed Matt's hand and wouldn't let go and then at the end of this chapter he did the same with his dad! What's up with that? I mean does he blame her for something? Oh, and I am happy Brennan is in another room now and that the hosptial staff and police are going to monitor who sees him. Will Sam be in next chapter? I hope he doesn't yell at her like he did his mom. I am sorry but that really upset me and I don't know why. I think because she seems so fragile almost like Brennan. I enjoyed reading this newest chapter even though my eyes were all red and blotchy afterwards. Thanks so much for updating, you are the greatest.
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November 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That was a very touching moment between Brennan and his dad at the end.
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story makes me cry and cry. But I'm glad I got through it to this part. Brennan's emotions are so tangible they seem to jump off the screen at me. You really know how to twist my emotions! I'll be back for more.
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow Maddox,
That was another amazing chapter, and definatly worth the wait. I felt bad for 'Ducky' but she did violate codes and she shouldn't have contacted Matt. I thought it was hilarius that he scared the stuffings out of Louise lol. I had been wondering about the reunion with his parents and this seems very realistic. Its obvious that he would not want to see his family. I hope that he can quit feeling guilty. It just made me cry when he said that he wished he was dead.
Then his Mom came in to wash his hair. I can't believe Brennan had been so mean with his mom, it made me cry. Worrying for five months and not wanting to think the worst and then have your own son say he wished he was dead, and he wasn't their son. OH GOD that was harsh. I mean I understand completly Brennan's outburst, how he would feel that way. Doesn't stop me for feeling so bad for his mother.
We only got to see his Dad in the end.
What can I say but wow? Now as for the room change, if I was in Brennan's shoes I'd be panicking too, to be told they were putting you in a room, under a different name. That they would have police outside his door. They assure him that its just for protection. I'm sure Brennan has it right though. If Phil and Al don't know he survived alrighty I'm sure they could connect him to being the unidentifed guy. I wonder if the police aren't hiding something from Brennan because of the state he is in, maybe he couldn't handle being told there was a witness or something. I don't really know I've got so many theories.
Seriously though i don't see how Jason could've escaped on foot, being injured and everything what if Richard grabbed him? My thoughts are on him as well. Brennan acted the way anyone in his situation. I just hope his Mom understands that Brennan loves him, and that he needs time. I still don't think this experience will be something he ever heals from. And just seeing how he acted now it makes me kind of worried if he ever had to face Al and Phil (maybe Richard) in a courtroom in the future.
I know Brennan doesn't want to talk to a shrink, but I hope he does find someone out of this mess. I hope Sam comes into the picture. So I am going to be patient and wait for the next chapter. Can you believe I've cried every chapter of this story. Hopefully in the future there will be happiness for Brennan.
Oh and I was over on Tumblr and I'm sorry people have been so mean to you. I want you to update but I understand you have a life too. (didn't stop me from checking tumblr everyday tho to see if you updated :) )So just take your time because your story is amazing. It shows in your work that you take time to make it great. Just wanted to point out one tiny thing, I apologize cause I'm really not trying to be rude. But when dr. carson is talking to Brennan telling him that it would be foolish for the men to come into the hospital, on the next line you wrote My racing continued to race. Pretty sure you meant heart. LOL sorry about that.....man now i feel bad for pointing that out.
Anyway I hope we see more of his family in the next chapter, maybe he could even talk to the shrink? I don't know but your chapters always amaze me.
Take care. And I look foreward to reviewing the next chapter. I'm just going to get some kleenex now lol.
That was another amazing chapter, and definatly worth the wait. I felt bad for 'Ducky' but she did violate codes and she shouldn't have contacted Matt. I thought it was hilarius that he scared the stuffings out of Louise lol. I had been wondering about the reunion with his parents and this seems very realistic. Its obvious that he would not want to see his family. I hope that he can quit feeling guilty. It just made me cry when he said that he wished he was dead.
Then his Mom came in to wash his hair. I can't believe Brennan had been so mean with his mom, it made me cry. Worrying for five months and not wanting to think the worst and then have your own son say he wished he was dead, and he wasn't their son. OH GOD that was harsh. I mean I understand completly Brennan's outburst, how he would feel that way. Doesn't stop me for feeling so bad for his mother.
We only got to see his Dad in the end.
What can I say but wow? Now as for the room change, if I was in Brennan's shoes I'd be panicking too, to be told they were putting you in a room, under a different name. That they would have police outside his door. They assure him that its just for protection. I'm sure Brennan has it right though. If Phil and Al don't know he survived alrighty I'm sure they could connect him to being the unidentifed guy. I wonder if the police aren't hiding something from Brennan because of the state he is in, maybe he couldn't handle being told there was a witness or something. I don't really know I've got so many theories.
Seriously though i don't see how Jason could've escaped on foot, being injured and everything what if Richard grabbed him? My thoughts are on him as well. Brennan acted the way anyone in his situation. I just hope his Mom understands that Brennan loves him, and that he needs time. I still don't think this experience will be something he ever heals from. And just seeing how he acted now it makes me kind of worried if he ever had to face Al and Phil (maybe Richard) in a courtroom in the future.
I know Brennan doesn't want to talk to a shrink, but I hope he does find someone out of this mess. I hope Sam comes into the picture. So I am going to be patient and wait for the next chapter. Can you believe I've cried every chapter of this story. Hopefully in the future there will be happiness for Brennan.
Oh and I was over on Tumblr and I'm sorry people have been so mean to you. I want you to update but I understand you have a life too. (didn't stop me from checking tumblr everyday tho to see if you updated :) )So just take your time because your story is amazing. It shows in your work that you take time to make it great. Just wanted to point out one tiny thing, I apologize cause I'm really not trying to be rude. But when dr. carson is talking to Brennan telling him that it would be foolish for the men to come into the hospital, on the next line you wrote My racing continued to race. Pretty sure you meant heart. LOL sorry about that.....man now i feel bad for pointing that out.
Anyway I hope we see more of his family in the next chapter, maybe he could even talk to the shrink? I don't know but your chapters always amaze me.
Take care. And I look foreward to reviewing the next chapter. I'm just going to get some kleenex now lol.
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Poor Brennan!
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
With every chapter of this story my heart breaks more and more. This story literally make me feel so many feels. I. Can't. Even.
Tears. I am in tears.
I can't wait for the next chapter. I really want to see how Brennan progresses!
Tears. I am in tears.
I can't wait for the next chapter. I really want to see how Brennan progresses!
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Sorry to hear about the trouble over at your tumblr page but very happy you updated as I always am. I cried again reading this chapter even more than the last one. I am learning to keep my own personal box of kleenex by my side as I continue to read WITT. I am relieved they moved Brennan to another room for his own safety and will have police protection until they catch those animals. I am kind of upset with Brennan for being so mean to his poor mom. I know he's been through the worse of it but she has suffered almost just as much by not knowing where he was and what was happening to him. Re-acting like that will not help him with healing. I think sometimes he is being too hard on himself for not being able to stop what they did to him or get away. It seems to be bothering him more than his family. I really think the last part spoke more than words or actions. Brennan's dad just being there by his side, a strong and comforting presence few spoken words except for "I love you Brennan - no matter what." Oh, my gosh! That was one of the best lines do date in WITT and when he kissed him on the forehead and then Brennan grabbed his hand like a lifeline fade out. Thank you, Maddox, from the bottom of my heart for this beautiful chapter.