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February 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
19. Slumber
It seems to me that he's consoling her after she's just been rejected. With so little text, why do I strongly feel like it was a father figure who called her useless or unwanted? Another lover is unlikely, since they're together and he's in a tee shirt, so maybe it's just less likely that it would be a mother figure or boss?
Okay, I'm officially reading WAY too much into it. It paints a lovely, if sad, scene as is.
It seems to me that he's consoling her after she's just been rejected. With so little text, why do I strongly feel like it was a father figure who called her useless or unwanted? Another lover is unlikely, since they're together and he's in a tee shirt, so maybe it's just less likely that it would be a mother figure or boss?
Okay, I'm officially reading WAY too much into it. It paints a lovely, if sad, scene as is.
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February 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've said this before, but it amazes me how much can be packed into such a small space. This packs an incredible emotional punch, and I absolutely love it!
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February 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Moon - Very nice, I love drabbles! Simple use of the prompt that allows the relationship to shine through!
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February 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Drowsy - The breaking heart comes across clearly, tugging at mine. Thanks for sharing!
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February 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, especially given the background. I have to agree w/JayDee-- that the song lyrics break up your flow, which is very poignant in and of itself. Keep the faith. PW
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Drowsy - I can honestly say I like your writing for the prompt better than those Miley lyrics... I actually think it would work better without the lyrics breaking it up, maybe because it's quite a short piece given the prompt word limit. Still, where you write about feeling drowsy and then waking with the phone tone and improvement in spirits is good. Well done on another prompt entry!
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January 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This was incredibly raw, and honest, and very moving, and I sincerely hope you both can work it out, together.
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January 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good subtle use of the prompt, establishing the moonlight in the first few words and then having the whole scene take place in it. Sweet, too. Nice job!
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January 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
1. Moon (Week 16)
That's a touching little scene with a good look at Nathan and Grey's relationship. The opening mood comes across nicely, though it helps that I'm a fan of moonlight, or clear night skies in general. It's much better than, "Honey, I'm home. Get me a beer... What's for dinner?"
That's a touching little scene with a good look at Nathan and Grey's relationship. The opening mood comes across nicely, though it helps that I'm a fan of moonlight, or clear night skies in general. It's much better than, "Honey, I'm home. Get me a beer... What's for dinner?"
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January 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Awwww, such a sweet moon story. Welcome to the Prompts! Very descriptive, even with only a few words! Thanks for sharing, PW