rate_review Reviews

It was nice of you to poke your characters, and get them back into motion. I can appreciate the connection between magic, imagination, and writing fiction. This sounds like a story I had in my head when I was a young girl. I never bothered writing it, just dreamed up the scenario for a long time. That was always the funnest part of creating a story, the actual creation of it, not the writing. Your story is fun and enjoyable to read. Good luck on completing it. I know that you are working on at least 3 other stories at the same time. So, more power to you!

Chapter 10. Haha, forgot to login. XD

Go Tristan go! Blow the lakdjoaieth to smithereens!!! Then bang Jared just right so that he learns to listen to Tristan's warnings and not follow strangers no matter how tempting the offer is........ no matter how tempting the offer is...... dang it Jared, no matter how tempting the offering is! Oh well, Tristan to the rescue!!!! And wwwwwwwwooooooooottttttt!!! Another world is made!!! Ayato, you're the darn best that I've seen so far in putting smut and plot together without giving away the world of what is really happening. Now I've got to remember to stop by FB to check out your stories to vote. :DD Hopefully tomorrow night after I get home from work.

Thankies so much for the udpate and it's greatly appreciated since your updates made my day. Yay~!

Oh, oh,oh! Things are cleared up a bit! I knew magic was involved somehow but I never thought it would be as, dare I say simple?, as it was! I am amazed my dear! And I absolutely love it!

Chapter 14? OOO Jared is getting himself into trouble and Tristen (think i'm spelling his name correctly) is gonna lose Jared one way or another, registered or not. i can feel an ominous outcome in the next chapter. but on the brighter side, all that smut at in the introduction was real nice. i wonder wat the attraction is between Jared and Tristen though and if those with 'special' feelers like atmosphere are attracted to each other and some how unconsciously seek each other out. hm.... i wonder...

love the quick update and i'm buzzing for more! maybe a one shot on what happened friday night when Jared got bumped in the head? tat'd be interesting to read wat was said and done and if wat happened tat night had any affect on what happens later in the story. maybe the one shot will come later after half the story is uploaded? or it's a chapter as a reflection of relation?

Chapter 1-12. woot! caught up! i know wat i said now that got this all started. :D n i'm loving how this story is going! you always fascinate and feed oil to the fire that you write and boy am i burning. i can't wait for more updates and i greatly appreciate the credit of sparking your imaginative writing with my musing and thoughts. now i remember you updating one or more of your stories, so i shall now head over and read some more! thanks for the great work and keep on writing!

i like your stuff but this story confuses me. there's a lot going on between the characters that they know that the reader doesn't know...i just don't get it especially when we (the readers) are left in the dark. i get there's this game going on, but not the importance of it, or what's even happening with it. i'm just very confused. i don't even know where the plot is, i just know random things like that one of the characters trying to write a book...and the other character is some sort of referee for the game. and the two are fucking each other and the others don't like it? and now they do?

or something like that. it's just really confusing.

Normally, I don't review every chapter, but as I was reading this I almost go the feeling that Johnson was hinting to thefact hat he and Triston and them are from a separate world of their or some hoer author's creating. Or, that it is something possible and hence this world has lots of conecting worlds/dimensions due to this. Ah, but I'm rambling! I really enjoyed this chapter, fix actually, it's really inspired me to write again; the only problem now is whether or not I finish what I've started or if I begin anew! I also get the feeling there are a lot more people like Tristan and Maggy and them than , I suppose you could say expected?

I love this! I started reading it to fill the time between my nursing class and my EuroLit/writing class and I absolutely love it! I'm trying to figure everything out, and I think that might be my favorite part; trying to figure out Tristan's group is, who Jared really is and how they're all connected to each other and the other characters. Like I get the feeling from the way they talk that Tristan and them are something that make me think of sidhe or elves and I get the feeling they're like from a separate world/dimension/reality. Being part Cherokee and really into mythology and literature and tungsten of that nature I am really loving this! There's this vibe to it that I really like. I don't think Jared is exactly "normal" either. I really can't wait for more!

So...Tristan's group is addled, and...unusual. Are they aliens or some non-human magic, wielding things... or something? Or am I five thousand miles in the wrong direction? Regardless, I was kind of skimming over this, looking for something to read, thinking this was just this mellow, cute story, and then got sense of another type of vibe going on. And I love manic conspiracy and scheming and other-worldly craziness, so keep it rolling. Even if it's just mundane human neuroticism (because franly i know nothing of native american mythology or cards or runes or anything, so it all sounds fantastic, scifi scheming to me), something is whirling under the surface. And this seems like strange, interesting ride :)

Ew Jared's father kind of makes me go "ew"...
I hope there will be peace between Jared and Tristan's brother eventually. I like the interaction with his mother, she seemed funny xD.