rate_review Reviews

Oh....I'm liking this. These two really flare up on each other. So much fun to read! Keep it up!

Ooohhh, I think Kian's jealous of Clarissa! And maybe Shane and Clarissa shouldn't be making out in front of poor Kian. lol

Funny scene with all those pancakes. Boy was I hungry for pancakes when I was reading that! hahah

Great chapter; loved the kiss; they both have those funny butterflies in their tummies; too cute! :)

I gotta say I love the cocky attitude its pretty hilarious.

Haha, Shane is so insensitive, it's hysterical! Doesn't he like think before he speaks??? hahahah

Can't wait to see what he comes up with next! :)

Finally lol. Aww Kian he is just soo cute. And Shane is kind of an idot but I guess thats what I love about him. Please update soon!!

Shane is such an ass LOL i love him. I wanna see more of him because you know that he'll be all over Kain soon. Keep up the good work hon! and hurry up with the next chapter! Cop, chop!

Ok, so far this sounds interesting. If I may, I have a minor recommendation that may help make it a bit less confusing though. I would actually combine the first two chapters. The first one was good and I was able to follow well but then you get to the second chapter and all of a sudden Shane is talking about things that happened before Kian arrived, which threw me. I actually had to stop and think for a minute before I realized what he was talking about. So what I would recommend for that would be to re-word the first part of shanes POV so that it shows it already happened and THEN going on with his present pov when he steps out and see's Kinn. Or just re-ordering the POVS. Because jumping from Kian watching Shane leave the room too before Shane even took a shower confusing. Does that make sense? If not send me a post in the forums and I will try to explain what I mean better. Hope this helps! Oh and my forum name is demonsangel

oh boy Shane is gunna be a hand fulli can tell...but hopefully kian can tame him and spank in him some manneres XD ...yes i'm a bit of a kink >_> But anywho cant wait for the romance and take ur time with it too make me beg...= / so i guess i'm going for awekward tonight lol

Shane is so funny in his utter love for himself! He thinks he's God's gift, hmmm. And I can see that Kian agrees with him. haha

Great chapter; looking forward to getting the next one. :)

yes you should continue!! how could u not with a wet nakied man waiting?