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person PhuurtyNiel
schedule October 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Can I be the only reviewer not to suck your dick here, and just tell you that as a writer...you need help. Alot of help. Writing something in present tense gives no emotion to any sort of tale. the Direction is lacking..the name Aubrey for a guy?
My thoughts are that you are a girl.
And girls trying to portray gay males make me sick.
We aren't like that.
I look at all of the gay fiction on here and honestly, I am unsettled. I feel like females write gay erotica so they can feel better about themselves. Usually its a self esteem thing. Or their current relationships are unsettling. I don't know. Anyway, take an English class, then come back and write. You have potential, I guess. But try to be more human rather than fangirl in your writing.
person reader1962
schedule November 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good story, easy, fun reading, when r u going to finish it?
person annabellalee
schedule January 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I got so excited when I saw you updated. I really love this story its so cute. Please update soon.
person Sarkukka
schedule January 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Great icebreaker that nipple conversation. =D
And I'm getting the Aubrey's point not telling 'I wrote the hot-hot-ero book...' Good for pick-up line? ;)
I hope the monster is going to be reallyreally small with just bearable baggage.
Great fic! Thank you so much! Eagerly waiting more. <3

schedule January 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okay that last line made me laugh for a good ten minutes and I still chuckle when I think about it.
person betrayed
schedule January 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
:) loving this storyy update soon please?? :D
schedule January 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, this story keeps getting better and better! Peppermint whateverwhatever coffee; some gay ass drink! Loved that line!

And thanks for clearing up the whole Emily and her car thingy! lol

Awesome chapter; I can't wait until dinner! :)
person RJaneyP
schedule January 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hot, humorous, and I can't wait to read more. The only thing it needs is a little whipped Cream on top! G
person Sarkukka
schedule January 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I laught myself silly! This fic of yours was really funny and I'm eager to see what happens next. I'm bit pazzled why Aubrey is ashamed of his erotica book. Surely not a thing to tell on a first date but otherwise...nbd.
And I was also petrified that you'd only got two reviews. That's just laziness of your readers. Too bad! Let's hope this will change.
Thank you for this great fic. Please, more. Pretty please!
person annabellalee
schedule January 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is really cute. Please update soon!!