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January 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yep, loved the story! I'm so glad Darren is giving Ben a chance. Even tho I really like Mike, the whole cousin thing, Idk...altho AFF has definitely corrupted me; with incest, twincest, younger kids, (still ewww in my book); I still read it! lol The only thing I will NEVER EVER EVER read is anything to do with young, young kids and animals.
That being said, the whole Mike and Darren thing was not ewww, it was pretty hot; but I'm glad Darren's giving Ben a chance. Ben could be the perfect boy for him; loving, attentive, generous, etc., etc., and the best reason of all: HE'S NOT YOUR COUSIN!!! lol
Great story! Looking foward to reading more from you! :)
That being said, the whole Mike and Darren thing was not ewww, it was pretty hot; but I'm glad Darren's giving Ben a chance. Ben could be the perfect boy for him; loving, attentive, generous, etc., etc., and the best reason of all: HE'S NOT YOUR COUSIN!!! lol
Great story! Looking foward to reading more from you! :)
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January 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Mike did such a great thing for Darren when he got Benjamin to come to the house to make up. That just shows how much he loves Darren, even if he's jealous of his relationship w/Ben. Altho really, he and Darren should really stop what they're doing, but then I guess it doesn't make for good slash! hahahh
Looking forward to the next chapter! :)
Looking forward to the next chapter! :)
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January 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well Mike is brave! I guess he doesn't realize that Darren likes Ben also. Hmmm, I see a lover's triangle coming on! lol
Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
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January 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ah, poor Ben, finally showing his feelings to Darren, only to be knocked down.
And of course Darren; having to hide his horrid secret for so long. I don't know how Mike is going to be able to look his father in the eyes after knowing what he did to Darren, the scum.
And of course Darren; having to hide his horrid secret for so long. I don't know how Mike is going to be able to look his father in the eyes after knowing what he did to Darren, the scum.
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January 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I had a feeling Benjamin would get jealous. At least Darren knows of Ben's feelings.
So, that's really sick; Darren's uncle raped him? And Mike knew about it? I think Darren's better off w/Benjamin. Another plus for Ben is that he's not related! lol
I did notice another couple of words that many authors tend to mix up. Loose should have been written lose, as in to lose something, to lose a friendship, etc. Loose is when something is loose, let's say, my button is loose and will fall off. Ok, lame, but you get the picture. Also you used you're as in you're teacher, it should have been your teacher. You're is a contraction, used for you are. Your is a possessive word; your teacher, your desk, etc.
Oh, and when Darren and Mike were looking in the mirror, I think Mike was starring at Darren; staring only has one "r".
I think that's all I remember w/o writing them down. Sorry....
Great chapter; I can't wait for more drama! lol :)
So, that's really sick; Darren's uncle raped him? And Mike knew about it? I think Darren's better off w/Benjamin. Another plus for Ben is that he's not related! lol
I did notice another couple of words that many authors tend to mix up. Loose should have been written lose, as in to lose something, to lose a friendship, etc. Loose is when something is loose, let's say, my button is loose and will fall off. Ok, lame, but you get the picture. Also you used you're as in you're teacher, it should have been your teacher. You're is a contraction, used for you are. Your is a possessive word; your teacher, your desk, etc.
Oh, and when Darren and Mike were looking in the mirror, I think Mike was starring at Darren; staring only has one "r".
I think that's all I remember w/o writing them down. Sorry....
Great chapter; I can't wait for more drama! lol :)
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January 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I like it! I'm looking forward to more.
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January 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Whoa! That was a little twist at the end. Darren seemed to be rather straight; not knowing if a guy is good looking or not.....but I guess I was wrong.
Great new story! I just wanted to point out, (a lot of non-English authors make this mistake), towards the beginning of the chapter when Ben went to get paper to wipe his book, you wrote he was hoping to safe, it should have been he was hoping to SAVE what little he had written there.
Anyway, can't wait for more! Loved your first story; so I know I'm gonna love this one too! :)
Great new story! I just wanted to point out, (a lot of non-English authors make this mistake), towards the beginning of the chapter when Ben went to get paper to wipe his book, you wrote he was hoping to safe, it should have been he was hoping to SAVE what little he had written there.
Anyway, can't wait for more! Loved your first story; so I know I'm gonna love this one too! :)