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for Ancient legacy

by nekochannya

person Adrielle
schedule December 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
An intriguing start! This is a promising story and I hope that you'll continue writing. Looking forward to reading more.
Cheers!
person Anonymous
schedule December 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting story. But, you didn't have your character react to the mind reading. He acted as if it was an every day occurrence. I suggest you have him be at least a little surprised about the mind reading. Again, cool story. I can't wait for the next chapter.
person maloanne
schedule December 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginning. I like the way you write. I hope you will continue this.
Bye
M