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Oh, thanks for the lightening fast update. Best x-mas present ever! I particularly loved the scene when “Mario” finally catches up on how Mathew has been depriving himself of his favorite things, Mathew’s shame about being found out… and suitable explosion. That was a really nice touch. Like many, I’m really enjoying pill-junkie Mathew. It was also a smart way of writing around his 435466 phobias in a believable manner without rendering his character less interesting and unique in his very special (in)sanity.

Lol. You should work on your confidence, then. :) Most people can’t even finish a story, let alone deliver them with credible characters and original outcomes to boot.

As for Asher, it’s hard to make suggestions since this is your story and your character. At the peril of repeating what you probably already know (and did), I’d suggest you spent *more* time inside his head - What does he think when he is not thinking of Mathew or business? What does he do when he is not around Mathew? Who else is important in his life and why? What random details about his life Mathew is not aware of? Then you can have some of this info sneak into the body of your fic and surprise the kid who thinks Asher is God. Other option is showing him a bit more through the people who know him better than Mathew does, in that show don’t tell manner you’re so good at. This second option has the advantage of allowing the readers a deeper look into the character without marring your boy’s archetypal image of his hero/deity/tormentor :) But the truth is, your choice really depends on what you want from Asher in this story.

Speaking of show don’t tell, you totally get my thumbs up for character development after four years of absence. The idea that current-day Vincenzo doesn’t quite match the Vincenzo Mathew remembers is very awesome, realistic and delightful. The same can be said about Matthew himself, of course. And it is a pleasure to watch the characters readapting to each other.

Anyway, thanks again for your update! Will totally be looking forward to the next chapter.

Aaah! *fangirls*

Mario! I love Mario! He's so awesome~ Please have more Mario, Asher is derpy and not worthy of Matty =D

Did I mention that I love Mario?

I LOVED this chapter. Like I said, Vincenzo is my favourite character, and it makes me grin immensely when he makes pseudo flirtatious comments directed at Matthew. I did notice he was in an unexpectably good mood..not out of character but it's a great contrast to his angry, bitter, gruff self in Muffin. Also, I really liked that this chapter was so lighthearted...it's a nice change since the latter half of Muffin was pretty dark. I'm kind of praying that he'll take his intrusion of Matthew's home further - into his bed! Yum. Hazzah.

As for Enclosure...yeah, I'm sorry about that. I always do it. I write write write, delete. I seem to have a case of obsessive minimalism, in which I delete and destroy EVERYTHING, including my writing. I feel awful and guilty, so let's change the subject tooo...Vincenzo! Huzzah. He sounds extra sexy right now. It is most excellent!

I loved muffin and I've checked for more every few days and today there was more. And its the next saga Mathew! (Fangirl squeal) Thank-you for the first three chapters an I am in dire need of more so PLEASE update soon!

I just found this story, saw your note, and went back and read all of Muffin. I am now hooked on Matthew so consider me a new fan. I hope you update this sequel daily until you go back to school and then after that as often as your busy schedule allows.

I'm so glad that there is a sequel to Muffin!
Poor Matty. I feel so sorry for him :( I hope this story has a happy ending for him.

I love you! I liked those characters so much I am really glad to have them back. I bet the knocker is Vincenzo. From the fact that Ashley is going out with a grungy guy who has a limp. Which would make me the worst detective ever since it's no evidence at all. Gosh now I wonder how I'll survive with only a chapter once in a while. The suspense is going to kill me T_T

Merry Christmas! Ack, my house is so busy right now, I'm so glad I can get away from all the prepping and read this. Another great Christmas gift. ^^

Gosh! Vincenzo is such a flirt. Well, if Asher isn't around I guess he can do whatever he wants with Matthew, hahah. At least someones around for Matthew now, and the story is started to build up a lot more.

Hopefully, I can remember some of my basic French whenever the lines pop up (I quit taking French because it was boring *cough*), but I clearly got the "merde" part. ;)

Cliffhangers are okay... A bit frustrating, though, especially when you really really want to know what's going to happen next. But they aren't so bad if it's left during an extremely climatic moment.

And, aww. Matthew still has the diner key chain he got from Asher (looking back, he also had it in the second chapter, but I forgot about that)... I find that sort of sweet.

Once again,
Merry Christmas!

Sorry for another review after just posting one! Just gotta correct myself on when I said, "But they aren't so bad if it's left during an extremely climatic moment", about cliffhangers, I meant they aren't so bad if it ISN'T left during an extremely climatic moment. I need to proofread my reviews about a hundred times, because I always make little mistakes like those a lot.
Sorry again! Dx"

yay! Lovely xmas treat (better than the socks).

And yay for Vincenzo showing up! Matthew needs a little tough love (and regular love too) to snap him out of his fog. They have such a strange relationship (you're the only writer to make molesting scar tissue strangely hot) they need to just do it already j/k. Although I'm pretty sure Asher would combust if he found out.

"little bad luck charm" "I think he has some personal vendetta against muffins"
lol to both of these, but awww, sad too. I loved the part where Matthew was slowly freaking out from his pathetic life being revealed.

So many questions... is Vincenzo still working for Asher (the first part said he "disappeared" but I suppose they may still be in touch)? I hope nothing happens to him but I'm worried. Why would Matthew be asking Asher for help (who he knows hates his guts) in the prologue and not Vincenzo at that point?

"What would happen with Leah? What about Alrick?"
Yeah, I want to know too. Poor Alrick, such a sweet fatherly guy to Matthew, and then he ends up taking the fall for a prison term (and oh lord I hope nothing happened to the mother of Leah). He's the one that really should be pissed, but I'm guessing he'll forgive Matthew.