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Hi and I hope you enjoy your New Year's eve with someone you love or just a good friend.
Me, I hope you post new chapter, cause I love Matthew, Vincenzo, Asher, Alrick and just the whole
sequel. It would be a great way to start the new year too. Be safe and enjoy the evening.

heloo hellloooo helloooo Mahsa
It's so good to hear from you so soon! :D

It's been 4 years eh? xD I meant, in storyline sense~ soooo muffin's... (shit i forgot his age).
was he 18? so means he's around around 22 now? early 20's?
Woooowwwiiieeee~

and he needs help... hehehhehehhe~

and Asher is soo stonned.... hehe....

and Muffin is back... hehhe...

OK NEXT CHAPTER

OK, I totally squealed out loud when I saw this story posted! lol And of course, I am loving it! Can't wait for more! :D

Who was she? Why did her mother discard her at my doorstep? More importantly, what did it have to do with me?

Muffin's grown rather self centered. Not wanting any more problems for himself. Not wanting things that break his schedule.
He's grown way too numb. all those drugs, just can't be good man.

I'm seeing him going into cold turkey once Asher comes back into his life~

NEXT CHAPTER! :3

Mahsa, you tricky one xD

you'll be getting an email from aff some time soon, telling you to remove your chunk of review replies xD

and who's this new familiar face? Alrick? I guess he had to be there, to take care of Leah while coomba and mario went dating X3

IM GONNA MISS YOUR UPDATES, once they become less frequent, BUT STILL, thank ya loads for putting up a sequel XD

NEXT CHAPTER!!

Thanks for writin more! I hope you can update today

GREAT JOB ON THIS SEQUEL! CAN'T WAIT FOR ASHER TO COME BACK. BRING HIM BACK SOON!

if there's gonna be a lot of action in this story this might help you: http://www.users.totalise.co.uk/~leiafee/ramblings/realistic_injuries.htm

:) i hope you update sooN!!!

I can't stop myself from reviewing since your story kept me awake at work for a few nights ;) (yup, nights shifts are fun). I'm a crime novel junkie and I'm writing a "mafia" story myself.

I really like your narration - you write from the perspective of a confused teen with a plenty of problems while not reaveling too much of the plot. Technically, I'm still in the shadows :P - what's the purpose of the whole Pickett "family organisation", what do they deal with... etc. . Your writing style and vocabulary also fits an 18 year old with a limited world view. Ah, well, not a professional writer, so I am going to comment on everything else while confusing you with my chaotic comments :D .

You're evil - I mean the whole coffee drama was HORRIBLE - I had an urge to make another cup every time Matt was deprived from it :( . How can you do it to all the poor addicts out there? I really wonder if even after all the trauma he would have dropped the habit? I mean, gangsters/lovers/dead bodies come and go every day, but coffee is FOREVER!

The FBI/police here acts very incompetent, you'd think that they would be able to get an inside man if they managed to convinve a random kid to work for them. Throughout the story (from the whole limited view) Asher's gang isn't acting very competent either - with all of them too busy running around after Matt and being visibly involved with shady business. I think they're security was lacking a bit as well... Maybe the task force had a limited budget :P ?

As for the characters, my favourites are Vincenzo and Daniel (he seems to be the only sane one :P), I like Matt, but sometimes he's too busy throwing temper tantrums and kicking everyone who wants to help. He's obviously pretty damaged and in need of professional help (I don't think said therapist is doing a good job), that's why I don't really like Asher - he should have known better not to use/manipulate/try to control Matt. Generally, Asher is a fun guy to analyse - he obviously is used to having everythig working according to his plans and everyone bending to his will. I'm hoping he changed and realised he's pretty toxic; not to mention he shouldn't hold a grudge against Matt - I mean he was a kid, who should have gone to the police in the first place (I doubt they'd listen though).

Hmm... I think it'd be great if Matt & co double-crossed Asher and Carter and destroyed their little underground crime ring :D . I'd honestly like to see everything blow up in their faces in an action film style :D .

Okay, enough of my rambling, carry on with your story :) .

Ahhhh! I love it! I'm on the edge of my seat: as per usual. Oh come on! Matthew's had one hell of a life; I think he deserves a little bit of happiness. But you're the author. Just try not to make me cry too much yeah?