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Please forgive the below review for any spelling errors there might be. I am half asleep and giddy from the new chapter update.

Matthew and Carter? Sure, why not. The dynamic of Asher's big bad cousin falling for Muffin ("Sunshine") could be pretty entertaining. By the way I like Carter's nickname for him. It's cute. I can't see Matty actually developing feelings for Carter, but I can see Carter crushing on Matthew.

Oh, Asher. The poor guy can try to pretend to hate Matthew all he wants, but we all know the truth.
Checking his temperature? I believe the kid has Asher completely whipped--and neither of them knows it.(^_^)
Asher can go ahead and leave, but we all know he'll be back.

I'm excited to see the inevitable scenario when Asher finds out about Vin's little crush on Matthew (and Carter's crush, as well *fingers crossed*).

This story just keeps getting better and better... Thanks for the update.

YES!!!! MattXCarter! That will be SOOOOO interesting. Better than having a love rivilary between a boss and subordinate.
Thanks for continuing the story Muffin. At least the ending was can be something else now.

O.O Wow, this chapter was exciting! Though I'm kind of bummed Carter is still around to possibly cause more trouble later >_> Seems like some old feelings are hard to get rid of for Asher, too, if that temperature check was anything to go on x3 Can't wait for the next chapter!

What Matt x Carter? You nuts?! There’s enough matt pairings! There’s a stronger possibility for Matt x Rick than Matt x Carter. What is going on in YOUR head huh. xD
But for now…. I’m still on Asher baby’s side ;3 true still true… Asher… aw you baby! Just hug and kiss matty already! I know you wanna!
and WHOOOOOOAAA!!! Asher STILL sooooo care's for Muffin dear. He can't hide it no no~~~ 1st the 'making sure matty is following him out of the burning building thing' then the 'checking his temperature thing' aaaaaaaaaaaahh!!! this 'trying to be angry and cold towards you - but still care for you' thing is TOO CUTE! *goes crazy* tooooooooo cuuute!!!! xD

*sighs*

more Asher and Matthew please~ *w*

laters~

- nekoii

Vincenzo, Asher and now Carter! Some serious Muffin Luvin going on in this story. Really, is there some special pheromone this kid secretes? He should bottle it and send me some! lol

Loved this chapter!

*squeals like the fangirl I am* You've got a sequel~ Oh, I am so happy. ANd so far, this is amazing. Of course Vicenzo completely through me for a loop, I never pictured them. But, not that my mind has been given the hint it wont stop. And I can't even say which one I prefer ... Cause well, either is pretty.

All I can really say is that I love your writing, and that I look forward to more.

Holy shit, was this action packed!!!!! And who woulda thunk that Voldermort was in this chapter! Hahaha, ok, lame, I know....

So thank God Leah was rescued; hopefully she'll be ok and back to Alrick. But where is Alrick? If Muffin's Italian and Elena were watching her, and now Asher has her, that may not be good, right? And where the fuck are Vincenzo and Elena? Are they with Asher? Shit, all these questions!

What a great chapter though! Thank heavens for Rick; what a life saver!

So I'm kinda thinking Muffin's right; if Asher wanted him dead, he'd be dead already. Asher took the time (or had his cronies do it) to find out where Muffin lived. I know he'll be back. Oh, I know! All Muffin has to do is lick his lips and chew on his bottom lip; isn't that what gets Asher every time? lol

Ok, well good luck with your school work, that does come first!

So hurry up with that! Don't you guys have spring break or something? Here in the states on the east coast, all the colleges have been having spring break for the past two weeks. Then you can write another chapter! lol :) Who's in a hurry? Not me.......

"Put if he hears a more familiar voice,” he hinted with a grin." - Ch 8; "Put" should be "But."

Oh the suspense! I think you have perfected terrorising your readers :P .

I'm leaning towards thinking that everyone knew where Matt was... It seems as if Carter and his team were in France for some other reason (the warehouse with boxes which I suspect concealed weapons) and they wanted to off Asher (presumably with Leah - I think she witnessed something she shouldn't have and that's why she had to be hidden/protected). On the other side ot the barricade - Asher obviously planned attacking his cousin and killing him in the fire (hence the air supply mask). I find it hard to believe that if Carter and his gang easily knew Ashley was Matt's friend and tracked him down that Asher didn't have a slightest idea. Though, his comment on Vincenzo hiding him made me wonder - was someone actively wiping Matt's tracks and made a mistake which Carter noticed? Yeah ... I need the whole thing written down now and mailed to me to know :P .

I think Rick now wins the title of the sanest person in this story ;) . Him and the rest of the gang are awesome - maybe they all should form a counter-mafia team :P ? You're brilliant at characterisation - you honestly make me either hate or love some characters.

As for Matt/Carter - hmm, that would be interesting :P .

I re-read Muffin again, I think it is sad that Muffin has changed a lot, I mean you have completely changed his personality, Muffin was never one to be quiet and he always had a bratty attitude -> the reason why I liked him so much. But now he seems so emo and out-of-character. Even Vincenzo seems a lot different than what he was in Muffin. Bleah, I really hope you will go back to your Muffin-writing-style, it was much more simple but in a way that I loved reading. This may sound selfish or I don't know but I just think it's sad that your whole writing style seems to have changed and your characters are way different than before. I mean when Porto died in Muffin, Muffin did get a shock at first and became a tiny bit emo, but he did stay a brat with a big mouth. Hope you will update soon and please don't see this as an insulting review or anything, I am just voicing out my thoughts...you should re-read Muffin, maybe then you will understand what I mean?