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May 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interesting developement... As for the new ship, I'm definitely all ears.
It has been quite some time since the last post, so I'm rather worried about the storry... Should I keep my hopes up or start mourning?
It has been quite some time since the last post, so I'm rather worried about the storry... Should I keep my hopes up or start mourning?
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May 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hello!
I really adore your story. The quality of your writing is unique and clever.
I'm at chapter six. This was such a hot chapter, but there a few details that bugged me and distracted me from the hotness(a bit, not totally). I am french and there are two mistakes that I hope you don't mind me correcting. I know people hate it when it's done in reviews like this, but I don't know another way.
" “Avez-vous me manquez?” he grinned, approaching my chair with practiced smoothness."
I'm afraid it doesn't make sense in french. ("Je vous ai manqué?" or "Vous ai-je manqué?" are VERY formal questions):S The correct thing to say given the context and the level of familiarity and interaction is: "Je t'ai manqué?" (Frédéric was flirtarious) or "Est-ce que je t'ai manqué?" (Same thing) , I'd choose the first option though.
The second one is a very minor thing.And you can keep it that way, since Matthew isn't fluent in french.But if he is familiar with everyday language, this is something used quite often so we can assume he'd know what to say since it's so basic.
“Matthew?”
“Rien,” I whispered. It should be "C'est rien" (It's "Ce n'est rien", but even us french say "c'est rien" in the casual language).
That was it. Otherwise, you did a very good job on the rest of it.Great story! my friend and I talk about it often :)
I really adore your story. The quality of your writing is unique and clever.
I'm at chapter six. This was such a hot chapter, but there a few details that bugged me and distracted me from the hotness(a bit, not totally). I am french and there are two mistakes that I hope you don't mind me correcting. I know people hate it when it's done in reviews like this, but I don't know another way.
" “Avez-vous me manquez?” he grinned, approaching my chair with practiced smoothness."
I'm afraid it doesn't make sense in french. ("Je vous ai manqué?" or "Vous ai-je manqué?" are VERY formal questions):S The correct thing to say given the context and the level of familiarity and interaction is: "Je t'ai manqué?" (Frédéric was flirtarious) or "Est-ce que je t'ai manqué?" (Same thing) , I'd choose the first option though.
The second one is a very minor thing.And you can keep it that way, since Matthew isn't fluent in french.But if he is familiar with everyday language, this is something used quite often so we can assume he'd know what to say since it's so basic.
“Matthew?”
“Rien,” I whispered. It should be "C'est rien" (It's "Ce n'est rien", but even us french say "c'est rien" in the casual language).
That was it. Otherwise, you did a very good job on the rest of it.Great story! my friend and I talk about it often :)
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May 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ASHER<3 He's going to punish muffin for what he did. He wasn't being a good boy so punishment is in order ;) Hopefully it will be on his knees and then spread them and the punishment will not be romanticised rape but rather a cock ring and every mean possible to prevent him from climaxing. Serves him right lol
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May 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Please don't stop writing. People in their FORTIES still write on AFF.net!! So I hope you can keep making AMAZING stories till you're like ninety! xD Heart you so much! *hugs you*
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April 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Sorry if annoying you but good luck on your finals!!! I'll miss you till then, love *hugs you*
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April 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I need a dosage of Asher...stat!
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April 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
By nature, I usually stalk and never review. However, I enjoy your original fiction so much so that I thought I'd HAVE to drop a line and let you know about how much I enjoy the Muffin/Matthew series! Your characterization is so incredibly thoughtful that even your secondary characters have been fleshed out -- it is a rare find in most original fandoms to find this quality of work and it only makes the story that much more riviting. I hope that all is well in your updating process and with RL, but I won't hesitate at all to nudge you a little bit in my eager anticipation of another possible meeting of M and A :D totally shameless in my pushing lol
Once again, I think this story is amazing and I can't wait to find out what happens next (soonish, I hope? :D :D :D)!
Once again, I think this story is amazing and I can't wait to find out what happens next (soonish, I hope? :D :D :D)!
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
WRITE MORE DAMNIT!!!! GAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
<3
Kayser
<3
Kayser
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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so vry much for informing us of ur situation! I'm guessing the end of school for you will be near the end of next month? Can't wait xD
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April 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
please don't leave us for a year again like you did with muffin :( pleassseee update soon or tell us whats wrong, hope that you're okay, let us know?