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I think this is going to be a great one. And I think you should do both of their points of view (but not of the same events- it always annoys me when ppl do the same scene twice, b/c most of the info is the same and its so redundant).

I'm loving the serious vibe! I feel the greatest potential for humor would be in the dialog in the future between the two ^^; I doubt dragons fully get humans-even if they have been disguised as one for many many years.

Also, as much as I like switching POVs, I'm more interested in the dragon's right now :) at least that's my 2cents! thanks for the update!

I like the story so far, but I hope you continue in order to understand more about the characters. Maybe writing one chapter in Owen's pov will help bridge the relationship between the two if this is what is bothering you.

I really like the world you've set up. The rules regarding the dragon's existence (his treasure and name) are really interesting and bring me back to the fairytales, it's really fun and nostalgic. The banter between the crow and dragon is funny too. I'm looking forward to what comes next!

I like this so far. Until there's old man sex, in which case, BYE.

Haha. Who am I kidding? I'd still read it anyway. I hope you keep it from the old man's POV. It wouldn't be too interesting to read it from Owen's right now. I mean, what would he say?

This creepy old guy is hitting on me and saying some crazy shit. Fuck, where is the nearest exit.

Yeah, stick to old man's POV.

Maybe he just needs some Viagra to get his dragon up. Has he ever thought about that!? No? Well, okay then.

I'm glad you're able to juggle so many ongoing stories. That's something few have managed to accomplish. I hope you don't get burnt out one day and disappear for two years. That would really suck. But do update Juicy Fruit soon. And then you can find those 17 missing chapters of Swallowed by the Whale. Try looking underneath the rug or something. And once you find them, you can get back on the Arie bus and then update SFC. Don't know, man. Just a suggestion.

And here I was going to ask about Juicy Fruit... :p I don't know how I feel about this one. I tend to prefer stories written from the 'uke' perspective, not because I like fixed 'uke'/'seme' situations (they actually tend to annoy me more than anything) but because I identify more with the 19 year old college student then I do with the 2 million years old super powerful dragon? So I think I might prefer a story written from Owen's point of view. Then again, this could make for a very interesting experience, to get the other perspective. I'm also a little confused as to what's going on, but given that it's only the second chapter, that's only normal :p I'm also in more of a mood for some sexy/funny fantasy right now (finals and all lol), so that explains my mitigated perspective on this story.

I mean, it's definitely well written, with an interesting premise, and the heavy syntax is very appropriate to the plot and atmosphere you seem to be trying to create (I say 'seem' because from the A/Ns I gather you're not too sure where you're going with this?). I think you should keep writing it as it is and we'll see? I mean unless you think you want to change; in which case I'll gladly read from Owen's perspective but you can always switch points of views later in the story (though beware of doing it too often because I find a lot of author's tend to abuse of the effect and, bar a few exceptions, it makes for rather annoying and confusing reads in my opinion).

I find the Crow amusing, it's like one of those tricky fairies(?) I forget what to label it, but whatever. Though I kind of fear for Owen and what will happen. And the dragon lost its name and powers? That's kind of sad, yet interesting. I await the next update. :D

It is very rare for me to review something on aff (mostly because I am lazy) but I felt the need to let you know that I really really enjoyed reading this. It might have something to do with the 'ridiculously heavy prose'

I really hope you don't abandon this, and I don't really want you to rewrite it either. If you were going for sexy you missed the mark, but not everything has to be sexy right away.

Oh wow! Now I love your other fictions, but this is something else. It's so original, and really intriguing. I need to know what the old man will do, though I have suspicions already, DON'T RUN OWEN >> STAY AND GET POUNCED! I wonder what his name is... The crow is pretty awesome, he sounds tricky.
Please continue! I don't even think this needs re-writing, it's perfect being in the old man's POV.
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i like the idea. dark though ya know, not fun like you wanted.