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March 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The more I read this story, the more I enjoy it.
It`s nice to see some variety in the way the girls are being manipulated, as time goes on. I`d be shocked if you didn`t have at least a fair deal of knowledge in most of the things that they`ve been subjected to! I`ve been constantly dying for this to update ever since I first came across it, back when it only three chapters - I check every day. (: The anticipation between chapters is making me crazy!
Keep up the good work, honey. This is probably one of my favourite stories! <3
It`s nice to see some variety in the way the girls are being manipulated, as time goes on. I`d be shocked if you didn`t have at least a fair deal of knowledge in most of the things that they`ve been subjected to! I`ve been constantly dying for this to update ever since I first came across it, back when it only three chapters - I check every day. (: The anticipation between chapters is making me crazy!
Keep up the good work, honey. This is probably one of my favourite stories! <3
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March 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story is getting increasingly interesting. It seems you have a great knowledge of different /d/-type items. I anticipate your next update. I wonder how the story is going to end; will any new characters be introduced; how many girls there really are; will you be adding any milking fetish in there (my favourite)?
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March 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I think your writing is great. To answer some of your questions inserted throughout the fic:
I am as interested in the quality of the text and the story as with the fetish content, which I also really enjoyed. To be fair, when I clicked the link, I didn't expect anything special, and was very pleasantly surprised. Thank you for creating and for sharing (if it was you). My only suggestion would be to keep writing, preferably from your own imagination (you started very good, and I like the character development, even if towards the end you said you made it more like "on the fly"). I read all the chapters, will probably reread them in the future, and await new chapters.
On a personal note, I'm almost disappointed it isn't a private prison hiding there horrors, but in any case I'd like some background on the facility too. For all I know, the warden lied to Zoe about being a research facility and it could be anything.
I also agree with those above that some background story for the other characters would be interesting. Maybe people they knew were buying them, maybe they meet some colleagues from work/college, something like that, maybe the warden takes some other girls she knew to break them, like she did to Zoe. Just indulge your ideas, have fun, we sure do ;)
I am as interested in the quality of the text and the story as with the fetish content, which I also really enjoyed. To be fair, when I clicked the link, I didn't expect anything special, and was very pleasantly surprised. Thank you for creating and for sharing (if it was you). My only suggestion would be to keep writing, preferably from your own imagination (you started very good, and I like the character development, even if towards the end you said you made it more like "on the fly"). I read all the chapters, will probably reread them in the future, and await new chapters.
On a personal note, I'm almost disappointed it isn't a private prison hiding there horrors, but in any case I'd like some background on the facility too. For all I know, the warden lied to Zoe about being a research facility and it could be anything.
I also agree with those above that some background story for the other characters would be interesting. Maybe people they knew were buying them, maybe they meet some colleagues from work/college, something like that, maybe the warden takes some other girls she knew to break them, like she did to Zoe. Just indulge your ideas, have fun, we sure do ;)
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February 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I reviewed your other story so I thought I might take two seconds to review this one too.
It's good. Helen is gross. And how on EARTH did she get a grant or what have you to perform things like this? I mean, if she had legal employees (Zoe), she obviously has some sort of support. Obviously has something to do with mind control over women (since men apparently aren't being used) which is disturbing that a WOMAN would do something like that to her own sex. And enjoy it too.
So that's my rant about the story line. It's written well with few mistakes and it compels the reader to continue. I wish you would have more answers though. I'm getting the whole LOST feeling (there are polar bears and bomb shelters but no answers), and, no offense, but I stopped watching LOST in the third season. I think it would be good if you offered answers every now and then. Maybe people would be MORE inclined to read it if they had less questions. Just my two cents though. Keep it up.
It's good. Helen is gross. And how on EARTH did she get a grant or what have you to perform things like this? I mean, if she had legal employees (Zoe), she obviously has some sort of support. Obviously has something to do with mind control over women (since men apparently aren't being used) which is disturbing that a WOMAN would do something like that to her own sex. And enjoy it too.
So that's my rant about the story line. It's written well with few mistakes and it compels the reader to continue. I wish you would have more answers though. I'm getting the whole LOST feeling (there are polar bears and bomb shelters but no answers), and, no offense, but I stopped watching LOST in the third season. I think it would be good if you offered answers every now and then. Maybe people would be MORE inclined to read it if they had less questions. Just my two cents though. Keep it up.
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February 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Keep writing! I'm still reading and I doubt I'm alone. Another good chapter!
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February 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
still reading :)
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February 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really don't like F/F but once I started your story I just couldn't stop it. Also is one of the girls gonna end up pregnant seeing as none of the men used condoms. Good job on your story
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January 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love your story!!! Great ideas and wonderfully written. Keep up the fantastic work!!!
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December 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok....creampie, check. Maybe dp? And some more bondage in uncomfortable positions?
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December 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I gotta say this is incredibly hot. Im going to need to blink here shortly, but then i would have to stop reading :P And can someone get me a tissue..maybe 3?