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Wow, .... this last chapter was just...Wow. Omg with the licking, gagging and licking of um...that certain spot. It really paints a picture.
Good job Hoop : )

I just realized that Claire filled in for the very same 161 that was giving the attendants a hard time. Helen had to be excused in the middle of telling us about her operation!

Love it! More updates please!

Thank you for the quick update! It's just what I needed and I very much enjoyed the inclusion of 212. :)

I eagerly await the next update, though you've satisfied me for the time being. I'll be able to wait longer than usual after this chapter.

Whoa, two chapters so close together. I'm so happy!

This chapter was an awesome plot mover, now we have an idea for what the girls are used for! We know Helen is making some money and isn't just "training" the girls to be her own personal slaves. She's actually using them for profit!

I feel bad for Laura, when you put her in the position she was in I laughed (oh so cruel of me, I know) but I couldn't help it. It made me think of Bruno where they used the workers as tables for the food.

Claire toughed it out exceptionally well, I wonder what her treat will be? She was really complacent through this whole chapter (I suspect there was a camera watching the proceedings) but I think she has the most reason to be. Of all the girls Claire has actually been the one to have the most interaction directly with Helen. Helen has got the most fear in the girls, Emma flinched when she raises her voice, Laura is not even trying anymore. Helen IS the figurehead of this place for the girls. The Foot scene, the initial piercing scene, the torture masturbation scene, and this were all done to Claire; and make for a very tame Claire. I actually just realized today that Claire IS her favorite because Helen always chooses her to personally pleasure herself.

I wonder if she'll actually tell Laura that she was in the said room, seeing as Laura was unable to detect Claire in any way other than gratitude for the chopsticks.

Also, waiting to see Emma come out of Sens-Dep and Zoe to get her Ultimate punishment for trying to run!

Muhuahahahahaha *cough* Merde.

I just want to say that I love you.

This has gotta be one of my new favorite chapters. We get a little bit of everything; of the girls talking and Helen's sadistic nature. We get to see Emma's rebellion and Claire's submissive benefits. Then, we get to see a tiny sliver of tenderness from Helen, just to be sucker punched with a giant rubber cock. (lol)

I can't wait to see what's going to happen to Zoe soon, or Claire, it's going to be fantastic.

Thank you for updating!

As for names for chapter 21 I can't think of any good ones.. Rebellion, Compromise, Rape and Dildos (lol) Emma's Lesson, Forced to Submit.

Anyways, the only thing I want to see more of is this! Updates! <3

Oooh I can't wait until the next chapter. Seeing as this was supposed to be a scene change, the next chapter should be coming quite quickly, right? Right?

I can't help but imagine Helen being british. That cold, calculated accent, underestimating sarcasm...it sends me shivers every time. Finally she's indulging herself directly.

You know, I don't know what I was thinking yesterday when I wrote that review. Of course you've always used those words, I apologize for my lapse in thinking.

Hey Hoop! My apologies on a late review, I hope you weren't getting too excited you didn't have to read a huge review ;D

My apologies were first, but secondly I'd love to say THANK YOU!

I really appreciate the love you give your readers by incorporating suggestions into your works. It always turns out so well; how is it possible you give us exactly what we ask for but she manage to surprise us? What talent! I really loved to see Emma again, and the awkward moments at the beginning between her and Laura.

Speaking of, I think Laura played a very good part in this chapter. She is now a force working against Emma simply by not resisting anymore. I mean, what's Emma gonna think when she ends up being the only person not being 'rewarded'? She's going to be the one pleasing others until she gets her act straight. She'll also be the one feeling the most pain with the collar around her neck. I'm so excited you decided to bring that back, it was done extraordinarily, shocking her during the Big O must really be a painful- yet erotic- experience. It was described very well. I must also mention that I loved to see Helen's more violent approach, pinning Laura to the bed and making threats. I could really start to feel the pressure to submit, when before the girls were allowed to do whatever as long as they listened. Its nice to see Emma the rebellious reigned in. I love how Emma flinches at the sound of Helen's voice raised. It means whatever Helen has been doing, it's working!

I'm going to make this its own paragraph because it's perfect.

"Yes, Mistress!" She had said it now, and she couldn't take it back.

Perfect. Emma submitting to Helen's will is an awesome way to force her to give in. Saying that means that she accepts her position, even more than the creed or a cane. I look forward to that being enforced often with taps to the ipad. ;D Breaking someone does not have to be aggressive, simply by calling Helen 'mistress' she is giving her a position of power. It works in your subconscious, very neat stuff.

I must admit that during this chapter I did laugh a few times. Helen bursting through the door was hilarious to me, "Fair enough." She says, like its a game to catch them awake or asleep. Also imagining the guards wrestling the blanket away, and when Helen give the uncomfortable gag to Emma, "Just for that." Which was, in my opinion very weak and unworthy begging lol. Helen was actually in a surprisingly good mood (but still vindictive) despite the chapter she just came from with Zoe.

I have to say that this chapter was different from your previous ones. It seemed a bit...rougher; if only in the words you used like "cunt," and "pussy." It also felt a little less edited, I spotted a few sentence fragments in there but its not big deal. The chapter title as well doesn't seem to match the rest of the story, but I'm not complaining as the whole chapter altogether was suitably in character and more than I ever could've asked for.

I look forward to seeing your next chapter will I presume will include Claire and Zoe, or Emma and Zoe. I really hope to see more of Helen's bad side, she's just so unpredictable! :)

Unbelievably, I will cut this review short. Never fear though, when you post your next chapter, I will be here!

EDIT: I said 'short' when this review had three paragraphs. somehow I found more things to talk about. >.< Sorry!

I think this is a good story! It's well written. If you need any scenario suggestions purhaps needle play? Maybe?