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For the love of all that is holy
HOOOOOOP! UPDATE THIIIIIISS!!!
caps lock. Sometimes it's necessary.

*Cheerleader Mode* Ready, OK. We want an UPDATE, We want an UPDATE! We've been good so we want an UPDATE!!! U is for UPDATE, P is for UPDATE, D is for UPDATE!!! YAHHH!!! lol.

We're still here Hoop, waiting...

Please come back to us!

I know its three days late, but...HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!!!!!!!
Hope to have more great stories from you in this year : )

On the Twelfth day of December,
I wished Hoop would give to me:
Twelve guards guarding
Eleven chains clanking
Ten lords a-leering
Nine ladies lapdancing
Eight maids a-milking
Seven gags a-gagging
Six girls a-cuddling
Five golden dildos
Four enslaved girls
Three french men
Two latex gloves
and one Helen in a factory.

Whoa, did you know yesterday was this story's anniversary? How sweet. :D Grats on making it this far!

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I see what you did and...and good for you for changing things up a little but...

Personally I did not enjoy this chapter at all. I had trouble stomaching the needles in the first chapter but this... *shudder*

Needles are my worst fear (I had a panic attack when I tried to donate blood) so this was...not fun to read.

But it's no-fap November so what can I do? xP

@Fem,
It really is funny that we were both attracted to this piece when we are both afraid of needles and the very first chapter contains them. lol I had a harder time with the tattooing scene rather than the piercing one personally.

WARNING THIS REVIEW MAY CONTAIN SPOILERS FOR CH24.

Oh boy. What a chapter.

What. A. Chapter.

I was completely stunned at the direction this chapter had taken. I was expecting a fitting punishment for Zoey's ultimate misbehavior; but it seems I once again underestimated your ability to think of incredibly unique scenes and punishments.

Thus, I begin the review:
Emma the poor girl. She asked for her punishment I must admit. I'm glad to see a reaction out of her, very realistic. Loneliness breaks the mind more often than force. I appreciate how the other girls in the cell try to help her cope. It seems like they're always there for each other- except when one of them is on Helen's rape list.

I feel that Emma reached her submission/breaking point understandably quick. Sensory deprivation is a really amazing tool.

The only problem is, who now will be the force of conflict between Helen? I have a feeling after this chapter Zoey won't open her mouth for anything but to lick Helen's boots. Laura might find some strength in anger at what they did to Emma; Claire will probably keep her nose out everything and get pampered some more.

So I wonder then where will the new source of conflict be from? A few chapters of ultimately submissive girls then what? Hmm... Perhaps a conflict in management? News from the outside? A new girl maybe? Or will Emma rebound with some kind of hidden disobedience?

I was a little bummed that when Emma did finally submit there were no descriptions to her dialogue. In both times that she said "Yes, Mistress," to Helen I didn't really get a good 'view' of her. Was she sad? Spaced out? Depressed of fearful? I feel like the lack of a small sentence tacked on there ruined the joy of her compliance a bit.

Also, did they remove Emma's Electric collar for the leading one? I didn't see anything about that and I had a funny mental picture of her actually wearing both. xD

I love that you are putting more girls into your facility. More, unbroken girls. Fresh meat so to speak. I like the old fashioned style of watching the persecution of Zoey. Scare them at the start and maybe they'll be more complacent later.

I was truly amazed at Helen's casual torture. I thought that her expertise was limited in sexual abuse and mental torture. Boy was I wrong. That waterboarding technique was cruel. Torture has such a compelling nature to it.

I thought also that Zoey was going to share my fear of needles actually. I was wondering how she seemed to know what was going to happen to her. (And speaking of what happened to her, trust me I was flinching in my seat.) I also like that the other girl tried to stick up for her and was forced to watch.

I tell you, I knew that redhead would be a valuable character. I knew it! *dances* She is positively enjoying her work and her job, why else would she be performing task like that? She probably gets paid a lot too, if only for her secrecy and not proficiency. Apparently Helen is hinting to other talents. Perhaps torture without destroying the person, or specific brands of skill. Oh I'm excited to see!

Overall this was a good chapter with surprisingly little smut. (We might need some in the next chapter to satiate our deviant minds.) ;D I'm going to give you a 6/5 for impressive tortures and a 4/5 for not filling in some of the gaps. Also you get a cookie for minor plot progression. :)

I look forward to your next post!

Recal

Hooop! Its been 12 days~

I was hoping that you'd spam update for NaNoWriMo ;D