rate_review Reviews

This is a beautiful story, although sad. Every line, every sentence is structured with life. It shows the loveliness of your characters souls and the beauty you see. Keep it up. Life is hard to capture, and you did it well here.

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._. Loved it but... so sad...

Oh my goodness! I cried at the end! This really struck a chord in me because a girl I knew and was interested in actually did try to commit suicide once. She wasn't successful, thank goodness, and she's better now.
It was a beautiful story and it really hit me hard.
I like to think of autumn as the slow death of nature. Trees begin to fall apart and the grass slowly dies. Everything becomes colder, slowly but surely. The whole dream/limbo state the two girls were in as they either died or lived was really symbolic of autumn, for me.
You won this challenge! :D

... This is slightly unnerving. Just wanna get that out there. I mean, bluffs by the Mississippi; a favorite hoddie and ripped jeans. The first reminds me of where I live (because there's lots of bluffs not too far away), and the second reminds me of my own wardrobe. It gives me the feeling I'm reading about myself. Although I don't know anyone named "Timmy". I think.

Ut oh. I'm sensing a bad end here. *nervously reads on*

*sniffles* Bad end was certainly there. Damn. My happy's gone now. D: *continues sniffling sadly* But this was good. I'm kind of wishing that I'd read it sooner. I donno about the other entry, but I think this is a shoe-in for winning. Especially compared to my retarded entry.

Oh, my good gosh. That was incredibly sad.

Jeez... That made me tear up >.< I love how at the beginning you think it's just another sappy oneshot, but when you find out that it's kind of like...one of those dream sequences, it almost comes together so perfectly. I could see it so clearly, and I love how you described the setting. It really added to it, made everything seem more real
And the ending was so sad... When she kept repeating herself like that... Jeez. Great story though, I really enjoyed it