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Love the new chapter Allison. I am beginning to view that fraternity as a nightmare. I was about to tear my hair out when Devin made plans for the random hookup with P.D. I am glad that did not happen. I am so happy that Devin and James are talking together in the hotel room. I think Chris must be a saint to encourage such a thing to happen. I guess it is the trial by fire. If James is still in love with Devin, it will probably come to a head tonight. I can't wait to see how the night turns out.

Boy oh boy! Chris must really trust James! Leaving him in a hotel room w/Devin is a recipe for disaster! lol

Chris knows they both still love each other; either he's really brave, or really stupid! hahah

Can't wait to find out which! :)

Hi Allison. I think you should definitely consider selling the story at Lulu. I would be more likely to buy a book if it was an ebook or in PDF. I have an electronic reader so I prefer to have my books in electronic format. I have purchased Laevi's "Darkest Adventure" in ebook format from Lulu. I also purchased "Bloodraven" by PL Nunn (one of my favorite BL novels ever) from Lulu.

i'll brb to read since i'm kinda caught with my own writing, i have writing challenge deadlines to meet. just thought i'd leave a remark about your thoughts in selling this story online. you might want to consider having this edited. heavily. no offense. the storyline seems interesting but the flow and the writing style isn't something worth publishing. maybe you should finish the story first, read it aloud and ask someone (a pro beta reader or editor, if i may suggest) to go through it for you. i've seen excellent writers, even those who only write fan fictions, so i have plenty of point of references to compare. i love reading this story, it's such a light read but if i may be honest, it doesn't make me go 'wow' enough to be worth publishing. that's just my concrit. hope you won't consider this as a bad review.

I have been enjoying this story so far. I guess whether I would buy it would depend on the ending. I am not a fan of bittersweet endings.

It must be a little weird going out with someone you're already living with. It must feel like they're still roommates, and not boyfriends.

I do feel bad for Devin. I understand why he did what he did (not that I'm excusing him). I'm glad James has forgiven him. I guess Devin thought if James ever forgives him, he'd take him right back. Now he knows it's too late; James is with Chris. I think James would have taken him back if not for Chris now being in the picture. Just from the way he was thinking at the end of the chapter.

Happy New Year to you Allison! Looking forward to the next update! :)

Oh Allison. I want to reach out to our two boys, wrap my arms around them and clunk their two heads together. They are both so young and silly. So impulsive. What are we going to do with them. I am glad that Chris is taking it slow with James because it takes time for someone to rebound from a relationship. I really like Chris too and I feel that he is going to get hurt is he gets in between Devin and James. If I was a counselor, I would tell them to just take some time to decide what they really want. I just hope Devin does not kill Victor in the process. Even though Victor wants it, It worries me that Devin would convert his dislike for him into sexual violence. It could easily become a part of his personality that he might not be able to control in the future.

Ah, don't be so hard on yourself for this last chapter Allison. It wasn't like rape at all; Victor clearly wanted it, no matter how rough it was. And he wants more, so there ya go! :)

I still feel bad for Devin and James. Devin is so unhappy and he knows he can't get James back, at least not anytime soon. James seems happy, but who knows? At least Chris is treating him well.

I don't know if Devin's "dark side" is coming through b/c he's so depressed, or if it's only b/c of Victor. Maybe a combination of both. I'm sure if he and James got back together, this side of him hopefully, will stay hidden.

okay, first... i think victor needs to see a shrink. stat. or maybe not. i'm not even sure if he can be considered a mental case since his issues seem to be normal for some people. there are people who likes getting hurt, either physically or emotionally or... whatever. i have a friend who seemed to crave emotional and psychological torture from her boyfriend before and i was close to smacking her right across her head to knock some senses into her. but i gave up in the end, got tired of trying to understand why she was letting it happen.

anyway... i think victor might have woken up that sadistic part in devin that may have been long dormant and that devin never knew of because he had been always careful with james. now i fear that if devin and james were to get back together, devin might still have those sadistic urges and i doubt he'd be able to use it on james so there are chances he might, and i'm putting a stress on 'might', still lurk around and find someone who's willing to play the victim. that's a very serious case and i think that's the greatest test of love these two characters can go through.

i read a story - a fan fiction actually - that revolves around the same theme wherein the 2 male characters broke up 5 yrs before and one of the 2 fell into the dark world of addiction and sex because he couldn't deal with the pain of losing his partner. then they meet 5 yrs later and the partner dared to rekindle the relationship hoping to save the other only to go through hell of mind games and manipulation and so on. in the end, the drugs won and the addicted character made the most difficult decision of showing how much he loves his partner in the most painful way by asking his partner to leave, knowing he would only hurt his partner more if he stays. if you're interested to read that story, shoot me an email (mccloverville@gmail.com) and i'll give you the link. it was powerfully written. there's also another one from the same fandom that involves domestic violence but i think that's locked for members only. i'm telling you this because if you had decided to drag james and devin back together, it's going to be a difficult, long road because you have crossed a certain line here and placed devin on a very serious case, which isn't going to be easily solved by being 'forgiven'. it's going to be an ugly battle, not a fairy tale. so think about it, you might want to read the story i mentioned.

with chris and james, i have yet to see where you're taking their side of this story. i'm glad chris reserves respect for both devin and james and was gentleman enough to let devin know about it... well, with a little confrontational coaxing from devin. i'm interested to see where james and chris' story will flow. if james decides to dump chris eventually to get back with devin, well, he and devin so deserve each other then (and i mean that in a sarcastic way - they're both... i don't know... assholes? idiots? whatever fits?).

I am worried about how things are going for Devin. The title of your chapter describes things pretty well. he is falling into an abyss. He is depressed and not doing well at school and he is training his senses in the wrong way by taking part in violent sex with Victor. I am very sad to see Devin feeling so low. He told James how he feels but he doesn't seem to realize how bad that frat house is for him. His entire life is taking a downward spiral in the few weeks since he moved into the house. It feels like he is in a dark place and he probably doesn't even know how he got there. I hope things take a turn for the better soon. It is a very sad story for our young couple. Who knew that their relationship would be so fragile?