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I absolutely adored this one. It had all the trappings of an almost royal ball, yet it also showed us a mystical side near the end. Connor's devotion is all too appealing, and I'm glad Mistress is getting some character development, she's awfully intriguing. All in all, this was quite the captivating, immersing tale and I'm a bit disappointed it ended so soon. I can't wait to see what your wonderful mind cooks up for the next prompt.

I really wish the Mistress would have giving Conner the go-ahead to attack! Conner is adorable and he loves his Mistress so much! This was an awesome story! (Still hate Edward, though. -_-)

Turkey -

I'd say 510 is old, tho I understand what the daughter was going for! Sweet and to the point!

First, I love the "Snotty teenager" warning on its own. :) On the bright side, the daughter seems to have taken a serious interest in history and is also very tight with their religion... but it's funny how it's always either too little or too much with teens. (Okay, not really funny at all I suppose.) The daughter's overreaction makes the scene very real in my mind, and using "desecrate" and "carcass of horror," etc., makes it easier to feel the girl's true disgust.

Kudos to the mother for keeping her cool though. And all the more turkey for her. :)

Turkey - I guess from the snotty teenager warning, I'm supposed to side with the mother but, heh, I think the teenager's right - if complaining about the cold gets ya in trouble, there ought to be something fairly punishing for using a turkey in the context :) Glad you found something to do with Turkey that still fits neatly with the other bits.

Hahahah, what an annoying little twit! The mother should heft the stuffed turkey and smack her upside the head for being so snotty. For a drabble, you convey the mood pretty well!

But you wanted me to flame, so here it goes: OMG WHY IS THERE NOT A TURKEY/GIRL SCENE????? YOU FAIL! (:P)

Nice! I'd consider 510 years pretty damn old myself! Thanks for letting me learn something new! ^^

I'm starting to feel a little sorry for the novitiate girl. Which must sound strange coming from an author like me, especially as she pretty much brought it on herself with complaining amongst that group. I thought the description of her binding on the altar very erotic though. Nice little turns of phrase like the description of the straps. It is pretty good how you fit in the different prompts to the ongoing story, too.

The recaptcha for this review is Nature's Sarvised, which seems weirdly appropriate.

Cornucopia:

"The nail that sticks up gets hammered down," and the complaining noviate now risks getting nailed herself.

I'm happy to see that you're still working the challenges into a flowing story, and this one has some very nice detail. Connor's submissiveness is well played, and you made it very clear that the Mistress is very fond of him, though he clearly understands that her kindness is contingent on him obeying her desires even when she doesn't state them directly. (Hey, he should give courses on that to husbands everywhere.)

I have to admit that the set-up actually made me hungry, and the girl's punishment under the moonlight would make anyone eager to eat those berries right from the source. (Hmm, that would make for a very kinky pie-eating contest indeed; you've given me a very wrong idea now.)

It was great of the Mistress to turn a punishment into a miniature harvest festival for all of the members, sort of a pot-luck with a fantastic centerpiece on the table. Even on her own this young woman never forget her initiation ceremony, and the others will make a point to never let her forget it either. The story itself is memorable too.

I love that you are turning the drabbles into a story line, but that they can still all stand alone if need be! While I feel bad for to youngin' she shouldn't have complained! This is something that should def have fan art drawn for it :D