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January 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
(Review for chapters 1-11)
I love the imagery and emotion in your stories.
The description of the snowflakes on Aine in chapter six, and the hour glass breaking in chapter eleven especially stuck with me.
Your sex scenes are quite lovely as well. Your writing is so elegant and beautiful, it's a real pleasure to read. :)
I love the imagery and emotion in your stories.
The description of the snowflakes on Aine in chapter six, and the hour glass breaking in chapter eleven especially stuck with me.
Your sex scenes are quite lovely as well. Your writing is so elegant and beautiful, it's a real pleasure to read. :)
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January 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love the way this flows soo well from prompt to prompt! It almost feels effortless how you continue the interactions between Aine, Connor, and Edward without missing a beat of the weekly word! I wish I was this good of a writer!
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January 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I always find myself so caught up in your world, so vividly do your characters come across. I find myself drawn to Aine's strength more and more as she walks her own path in utter conviction. Just beautifully done!
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January 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Just like JayDee to hit someone on the head with... oh, figuratively. ;)
This piece was great, giving us two good scenes though with one clear message. Aine will yield some control, both to Connor and to Edward, but only on her schedule. The fact that she spurned the services then told him that she'd arranged a marriage (on the pagan timetable) was great.
So, is his obedient bride-to-be by chance easily controlled by giving her a fruit basket once in a while? (That young woman certainly won't be a complainer.)
Now, bolding the prompt word on every occurrence is a bit distracting, to me at least. I already know the theme will show up, so no problem there, and when I read your stories I like to simply enjoy the flow. The meaning of the sand and schedules, and the symbolic shattering of his order, was clear enough. (Or am I just reading way too much into it? ;) )
By the way, having Connor around is even better than flying first class, actually wiping her down with the warm flannel. On the airplane they just throw it at you, and the pat-downs before boarding aren't quite as pleasant either.
This piece was great, giving us two good scenes though with one clear message. Aine will yield some control, both to Connor and to Edward, but only on her schedule. The fact that she spurned the services then told him that she'd arranged a marriage (on the pagan timetable) was great.
So, is his obedient bride-to-be by chance easily controlled by giving her a fruit basket once in a while? (That young woman certainly won't be a complainer.)
Now, bolding the prompt word on every occurrence is a bit distracting, to me at least. I already know the theme will show up, so no problem there, and when I read your stories I like to simply enjoy the flow. The meaning of the sand and schedules, and the symbolic shattering of his order, was clear enough. (Or am I just reading way too much into it? ;) )
By the way, having Connor around is even better than flying first class, actually wiping her down with the warm flannel. On the airplane they just throw it at you, and the pat-downs before boarding aren't quite as pleasant either.
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January 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very nice! You've set up future options for prompts, worked in more of the strife between brother and sister while playing with Conner and Mistress's relationship as well! Nice work in such a small space!
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January 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this was very evocative, and a nice way to catch up on the prompts all at once! Just for continuity, of course! There's sucha a lovely and graceful flow to these, though, and a sweet, sad inevitability as well. Lovely!
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January 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Pillow (etc :) ) - I really got the sense of ending from this one, from Connors whole attitude despite her re-assurances to the contrary. Then you have the Pillow becoming essential for going back to bed, not just kind of forced in but a perfectly natural progression of the plot that would indeed involve a pillow. I guess I am saying it's a nice way to get it in :) Of course, once in bed they face approaching dreams for the other prompt. It's good story planning to fit it all into the ongoing arc without it seeming forced! (of course, possibly the dreaming may be put off for a while, least for the duration of any ahem service?).
Still, feels a little sad, like an ending more foreshadowed by the girl who complained about the cold and not seeing the point almost, can make a reader look back and think she's symptom of a growing trend as the old ways go.
Still, feels a little sad, like an ending more foreshadowed by the girl who complained about the cold and not seeing the point almost, can make a reader look back and think she's symptom of a growing trend as the old ways go.
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January 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nice work incorperating not one, but THREE prompts in one story :D Love the continuing progression!
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January 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Pillow (and Morpheus too):
I wonder if Connor would be happier or just jealous if he knew that Aine danced with Edward for the snowfall. For a "pet" he's very complicated, but maybe he doesn't even realize how special he is, especially with all that he does to support Aine. It seems that he has more power in the relationship than he realizes. You've also demonstrated even more how much Aine really cares about him.
Hopefully he'll be happy when she takes him to see the faeries' playground, but will she be able to convince him that she's right about being able to keep the old ways? (Is she even sure herself?) These are the intriguing questions that keep the series very interesting, though the other threads and especially the good characters are what make this series great.
I wonder if Connor would be happier or just jealous if he knew that Aine danced with Edward for the snowfall. For a "pet" he's very complicated, but maybe he doesn't even realize how special he is, especially with all that he does to support Aine. It seems that he has more power in the relationship than he realizes. You've also demonstrated even more how much Aine really cares about him.
Hopefully he'll be happy when she takes him to see the faeries' playground, but will she be able to convince him that she's right about being able to keep the old ways? (Is she even sure herself?) These are the intriguing questions that keep the series very interesting, though the other threads and especially the good characters are what make this series great.
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December 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yule - I was mildly disappointed that this one wasn't a flashfic, but maybe that's just the wide gutter of my mind talking. Once I got over that, I have to say the drabble works really well. In these few words the reader knows exactly what's going on with men and viewing mistress, and of course we have the extra emotional impact of Connor's extra forceful penetrating (hope the ribbon doesn't get lost). A warm fire, a good fuck, a nice rub... In short, good seasonal stuff :)