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for AFF'S Weekly Prompts

by ApolloImperium

schedule October 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well done! Short and sweet ... and very tasty reading. Thanks for sharing, PW
person Melrick
schedule October 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
lol A sweet story. Geddit? Sweet story? High five!

Anyone? Fine then, be that way.

;-)
schedule October 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Week 3: Candy

Besides what she's doing, the slow sensual build-up is an enjoyable tease in itself. It moves along naturally and reveals enough to enjoy the arousal while not being explicit, which is yet another part of the tease. The movements flow in perfect time too.

The singing at the end is just very cute and maybe a bit corny, like a "dad joke" but between significant-others.
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
1 Haunt
I know that feeling of being closed in and having nagging thoughts that won't go away, so I could immediately empathize with the narrator. From that short piece I have a good impression of who she is, her mood, that she's a schoolgirl, etc.

2 Witch
Short, sweet and charming. (Pun not intended, but you're stuck with it. :P)
person JayDee
schedule October 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Regarding the Witch prompt story: The Twitfic format certainly seems an effective way to get a lot of implication into very few words. It's funny how that speech probably would seem cheesy as a pick up line, but works fine in a bed.
schedule October 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well done, wondeful words written to form a wanton window to his soul.

Thanks for sharing,
PW
person Anon
schedule October 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like! Well done!