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June 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Love the story. Hope you keep writing this one. Don't worry about some of the reviews people leave. You just keep writing your awesome stories.
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January 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
gawd i love yuo're story. it's so romantic, and i can't wait to read the next chapter.
pleace do you're best.
love. a fan
pleace do you're best.
love. a fan
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June 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
very difficult to read because it the verb tenses are all over the place.
For example "Tobius's two friends walk back over to him as the classroom slowly begins to fill up. (present tense) Aleron kept his eyes on Tobius, as well his friends, even as the other class mates started piling in. (past tense) Class begins showing that the class was VERY VERY boring. (present tense)"
you should stick to one cohesive tense throughout the story
For example "Tobius's two friends walk back over to him as the classroom slowly begins to fill up. (present tense) Aleron kept his eyes on Tobius, as well his friends, even as the other class mates started piling in. (past tense) Class begins showing that the class was VERY VERY boring. (present tense)"
you should stick to one cohesive tense throughout the story
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May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
nooooo...you can't leave it at that!! more, pz.
it was getting so sweet. please, write some more
it was getting so sweet. please, write some more
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December 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE THIS!!! it says mpreg though so I'm wondering how long before we find Aleron pregnant. Update soon please!! Happy holidays!
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December 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I found this story and I could not stop reading it. I can't wait to find out if Aleron is pregnant. Please give me meeting chapters.
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December 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I just read some of the reviews and I don't get it. This story is really very good. It's the first combo m/m m/f story I actually like and I've been reading slash yaoi for almost 10 years now. The het portions are not annoying and the lives of the characters are intriguing. I don't get how some reviewers have put it down. Thank you for sharing.
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November 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this story and I know you put a lot of work in it, but I have a couple of concerns, especially over the childs reactions. I could understand why she didn't get the concept of death in the hospital, she's 3 & no proof of her mothers death is evident. But I don't get how she's always so happy and accepting after such a tradgedy. I want you just to look at it from a different perspective;
1. Her mother who was everything to her; who fufilled two roles of mom and dad, fed her, clothed her, took her to the hospital when she was sick and now she is gone plain and simple. Her main support system is gone now she has to adjust to a new and possibly shaky situation.
2. Now she is asked to call someone else whom she just recently met mother, which in my opinon is an insult to her memory, plus if the relationship went bad bettween the adults and break up was involved the child would end up with abandonment issues.
3. She is leaving her home probably the only one she knows to live with her dad who shes only seen on tv basically. I would think she' d be up set, angry even.
Please don't use bold statements like: "she killed her self" unless you back it up with proof. People go through red lights all the time, doesn't mean they want to kill themselves. If you use the state of mind theory then the main character would have to have a close relationship with the dearly departed to make that call. Tobias was not close, it don't fit.
1. Her mother who was everything to her; who fufilled two roles of mom and dad, fed her, clothed her, took her to the hospital when she was sick and now she is gone plain and simple. Her main support system is gone now she has to adjust to a new and possibly shaky situation.
2. Now she is asked to call someone else whom she just recently met mother, which in my opinon is an insult to her memory, plus if the relationship went bad bettween the adults and break up was involved the child would end up with abandonment issues.
3. She is leaving her home probably the only one she knows to live with her dad who shes only seen on tv basically. I would think she' d be up set, angry even.
Please don't use bold statements like: "she killed her self" unless you back it up with proof. People go through red lights all the time, doesn't mean they want to kill themselves. If you use the state of mind theory then the main character would have to have a close relationship with the dearly departed to make that call. Tobias was not close, it don't fit.
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November 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Awww that was awesome... Great scene between Aleron and Tobius... I really love it and can't wait for more
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November 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
egnore the rude reviewwer, its YOUR story you can write and have YOUR charactors do, say, and act how you want them to. plus peolpe do stupid things when they are depressed, even puting friends and family in danger with them. plus the younger a child is when things like that happen they usually forget them when they get older or they are able to move on easier then if they were older. plus the fact that she only say her daddy on webcam only makes her happeir that she is able to see her daddy everyday. plus she is happey to see her daddys boyfriend who is going to be her new parent, which she new about even before the accident. will she miss her mother of course is she going to let it consumer her no. anyways i love this story keeep the chapters coming, i can't wait to read more.