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September 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i love it...you have me totally hooked..:)
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September 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow JJ you need to look up next time!! I love how JJ is such a bad ass. I just feel so bad for Lilly, damn you Morgan!! It's so cute how the dogs are all over JJ. It's a sweet brief moment with Lilly and JJ, even though they didn't have eye contact. Keep up the good work!
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September 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, J.J. Way to go, dumby! XD Poor Lily, though. That Morgan needs a pole shoved up her butt, if there's not one already there. I think in the next chapter, J.J. and Lily should really meet! ^^ Also, I've noticed that you use the word "as" a lot for conjunction purposes. Try using "when" or "while" more often, or change up your sentence structure, for sometimes all the "as"s are too much, you know? I know that I like to use that little word a lot too, haha. See if it works for you. :)
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September 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait for J.J. and Lily to meet! :D I think you're doing awesome so far. I really like both of your characters. ^^
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September 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The story is progressing well and i love how you are introducing the two main characters. The foundations of these two are very different but somewhat similar with their unfortunate lifestyles. I want to learn more about their dark past! Well keep it up!
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September 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, I do believe I really like it. Out of curiousity though, who is Matt to J.J.? Brother or good friend?
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September 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
These two ladies are suffering both emotionally and physically. Very dark tone you set yup and i like it. I wonder how you will connect these two?? Please continue!!!
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September 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, let's see indeed. Can't wait to see more- well, assuming that more has happier times. x.X
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September 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This has a lot of potential, I think. Can't wait to see what you come up with. :)
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September 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm interested please contiune