rate_review Reviews

Very Interesting and good i like the byplay of Gabriel and Kitty, it made me smile, i would love to read more.

very cute, sexy, and awesome! Can't wait to read more sweetness YUM!

This story sounds like it has a lot of potential and i would really like to read it, but I am having a HUGE problem. Your formatting is making it almost impossible to get through. The writing in itself, is good--nice touches of humour and everything--but the formatting is like a wall i cannot get through. I couldn't get past the first chapter when i got into dialogue and i say this...."blahalalala...""balalalalal". This is so easy to fix. Open up a book you like and look at how dialogue is formatted. It looks like this ---
"blalakalalal...."
"blalalalala..."
Right? There is a reason it's done that way. It makes it not only easy to read but it allows the reader's eyes to pause. It also creates a distinct way for readers to tell who is talking. While reader, it felt like everything got jumbled together and made everything feel cluttered. There are some people out there who don't care about formatting and feel like they don't have the time to format. I sincerely hope you are not one, because i would like nothing more than to get through this story without headache. Contextually, this story is awesome. And i commend you for your originality.
KNH