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and you leave us at a cliff-hanger........ my anticipation is eating at me, i hope you're happy... i'm not going to get any sleep tonight now...

interesting now I'm hoping a certain someone comes to the rescue. Nice cliffhanger, well Imma go kill time and write and hopefully I see a new chapter when I'm done. I'm kidding take your time I can wait patiently.

Quick! 'Millie used Summon! Lynn appeared! Lynn used Beatdown! Deputy was defeated!'

But, if that happened, things wouldn't get (more) interesting and dramatic, would they? And for a second there, I was like, "He... he's not going to say that Lynn died is he? *subconsciously planted seed of doubt and started to make it grow*" Needless to say I was relieved when that wasn't the case. And then, and then, earlier in the chapter, I got a good *frustrated) chuckle as well, because Millie just had to ruin the mood that was brewing. I may have been waiting for the other shoe to drop, but it only slightly decreased the frustration and "Wrrrryyyyy?" when it happened. Can't say I'm not glad that it happened, though; might've seemed odd if the other shoe hadn't have dropped. And Millie's reaction was kinda amusing as well. *rambles on*

HO SHIT. I hate men. >_> If he does anything to Millie... Oh, I'm gonna whup some, that's for sure! By the way, the almost-kiss between Lynn/Millie was not fair! Why'd Millie say anything?! DKJSAKJFKSJKSAJDKL. Update soon please. :)

Nice little chappie. ^^ I like that Lynn is helpful towards the Native Americans, and hopefully she'll help Millie understand that not all of them are untrustworthy and savage. Lynn seems like a very well-rounded individual; I like her, as does Miss Millie apparently. ;) I'm sure that two women together during this time period will cause a bit of chaos, wouldn't it? Perhaps that's when we see a bit of a vicious deputy since I think you were foreshadowing him as an aggressive guy. Hm, anyway, enough with my theories for now. :) Keep it up, hun! I can't wait to read your other chapters!

*gasps* Millie hasn't mastered the art of not sweating off makeup? Oh, dear. And, it seems that when Millie takes a step forward with Lynn, well, she's dragged two steps back. Or something. But, man. I don't know how you do it, exactly. At the end of each chapter, I'm always left laughing or smiling, and wanting more. No lie. I think it'd be like reading your favorite book. One. Chapter. At a time. And not knowing when the next chapter will be available to you.

Well, maybe not quite. But something like that, methinks. And this chapter was good. It made me go, "Oh, snap, she snapped!" when Lynn, well, snapped.

nuuu!! ILIKEILIKEILIKEILIKE!!!!!!! there is soo much more i wish to see of this... keep it up please ^^

Well, I didn't start readin' this chapter in a good mood. But by the end, I was smiling again. (Partial thanks to my cats, oddly enough.) The end scene just made me go, 'd'aaawwwww', by the way. 'u' And, dat deputy. I don't like him when happy, don't like him when I'm sad, doubt I'd like him if I were angry. He strikes me as someone who could be nice and not as lewd as he is, but chooses to be all snarly and perverse (from what I've se--er, read so far) instead. .-.

But, so, I like this 'on a roll' thing. It's a nice surprise when I'm not expecting it. *w* And points! I get points for reviewing! ...Is there somewhere I can cash these points in, though? 'Cause I'm curious if I can get anything from them.

May I say that I already love this dearly? I love that it makes me laugh and grin, love the way the characters interact (especially Millie and Lynn, their exchanges amuse me greatly), love how it's set up, just... love it. x'D (Man, now I just wanna go watch some comedy movies. .3. And after this review, I think I will.)

Hm. I think my favorite parts from this chapter are the staring-at-the-bag scene, the mention-of-the-rooster part, and then when Lynn comes back and says, 'Can I have my bags back now?' and how Millie's just like, '*burst of energy* OH. Yeah. Sure. *continually smiles like an idiot*' Great stuff, here. Continually has me entertained.

That deputy is a real jackass and I have a feeling he's going to hurt one of these ladies sometime later on, or try to at least. Also, the cuteness between Shawnie and Lawrence! Awwww! They better hook up. ;) And, of course, so does Millie and Lynn! Hah, I would've asked Millie if she was stalking me too if I was Lynn. ^_^ It's a start to a beautiful friend(or-something-more)ship. ;)