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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I neeeeeeeed more!!! The waiting is driving me crazy! I can't take it! Noooooooo! But, good things come to those who wait. So I will wait. :)
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is such a great story. It is very easy to be engrossed into the plot. I like how you are developing the story edges-the town, the people, the boy and his strange abilities, rather than delving deep into the great mysteries-the soldiers, the banished queen, the stranger's job, etc.
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January 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Aww! Yker is so sweet taking care of the baby like that. I can understand how he would feel nervous after living with Mallika for so long. I can't help but wonder what his big grey dog is up to on his own. I love the story and I am so happy to see the new updates.
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January 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
nice. how olds yker?
liked this chapter very much. nice descriptions and characters. whys he so inturned with nature. weird? he half elf or something?
woooo, so roamer guy is starting to think of yker in a different kind of way. muahha. update quickly.
liked this chapter very much. nice descriptions and characters. whys he so inturned with nature. weird? he half elf or something?
woooo, so roamer guy is starting to think of yker in a different kind of way. muahha. update quickly.
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January 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yker is so cute. I just want to hug him. :)
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January 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yker is so cute! He seems to be really good with the baby. He finally finds something he can do to help w/o being criticized and being made to feel stupid. I'm sure he can be of service to the people there, if Phargo (sorry if I misspelled his name) decides to stay there. I think once he feels more comfortable in his abilities, he'll become more confident and be able to communicate better with the others.
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January 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3 was great. I love the camaraderie between Yker and the big grey. I hope Phargo realizes that Yker is not much of a city boy. He seems to be more of a forest spirit and he just ran away from working at an inn. I hope we will find out more about Phargo's mission soon. I found one typo :
a nice juicy *stake* garnished by stuffed potatoes for himself - should be steak
a nice juicy *stake* garnished by stuffed potatoes for himself - should be steak
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January 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
LOVE THE STORY!!! cant wait for more... it is certainly interesting.. Who is that boy really? he seems to have extraordinary abilities... is he really mute or will he have the ability to converse verbally later... update soon~~~~~ thank u!
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January 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see these two getting along. :)
Would love to see an update on how Alex is doing. (hint, hint, poke, poke)
Would love to see an update on how Alex is doing. (hint, hint, poke, poke)
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January 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Cute story. I'm enjoying it so far! I think you've done well with the details you've given and what you've kept secret for now. It gives the reader the desire to continue to find out what's going on. Well done! The only thing I have to add is on the beginning of chapter one: you said that the guy hadn't had liquid in a few weeks. He would have died. Humans can only survive a max of three days without water. Just change that detail a bit, maybe that he had nasty water from a plant or something, and you're good! =]