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July 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
both desert wind and the mute and the roamer are great stories that show greater promise still! please dont abandon your works! they brighten my life :)
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April 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I hope you're able to update this soon, I'm really curious about what's going to happen next, this is such a good story, there aren't enough like it on aff.net.
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February 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I don't get it. What happened to the kid at the end of chp 5? It was not very clear. I hope that you are going to continue this story. Like the rest of you work, this is very well done and exciting. I want to see how all of your stories end. Good job! Really, awesome story.
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February 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I'm really enjoying this story so much! Yker and Phargo (and the grey!) are interesting, compelling characters and I'm looking forward to the next chapter of their adventures--hope you're able to post more soon!
Also, I try to give constructive criticism when/if I can, but only to authors who have talent worth putting the effort into, if that makes sense. Your writing is too good for you to put it out there with the grammar mistakes that're in it. There are quite a few wrong tenses ("...he have gotten beaten enough...", and "...the boy haven’t seen that many...", from chapter 2), and several words that have been switched with similar-sounding ones ("The perspectives weren’t too good...", also from chapter 2; I think 'prospects' instead of 'perspectives' would work a lot better). It's nothing horrible, except that the caliber of storytelling you produce deserves better.
I hope my admiration comes across in this, because I really do like your writing a lot--I'll be keeping an eye out for your stories from now on. :)
Also, I try to give constructive criticism when/if I can, but only to authors who have talent worth putting the effort into, if that makes sense. Your writing is too good for you to put it out there with the grammar mistakes that're in it. There are quite a few wrong tenses ("...he have gotten beaten enough...", and "...the boy haven’t seen that many...", from chapter 2), and several words that have been switched with similar-sounding ones ("The perspectives weren’t too good...", also from chapter 2; I think 'prospects' instead of 'perspectives' would work a lot better). It's nothing horrible, except that the caliber of storytelling you produce deserves better.
I hope my admiration comes across in this, because I really do like your writing a lot--I'll be keeping an eye out for your stories from now on. :)
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February 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
did the meatloaf for dinner last night. the family loved it. like this styory too. up date soon
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
NOOO!!! He can't leave Yker! Go back for him Phargo!
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ykers weird... maybe hes an empath or something...hope he finds the grey soon.
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Love the new chapter. I was confused about what happened at the end. How did Yker end up alone? Is Phargo still hiding in the tunnel or did he already exit and leave Yker behind? Either way I hope Yker will be able to hook up with his dog soon.
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
he was abandoned :(
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awesome update!
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awesome update!
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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Poor Yker, he's all alone now... I hope he can find Phargo and the grey soon (and make Phargo understand that he wants to stay with him)!
I really like this story, which is still full of mysteries. Can't wait for the next chapter!
I really like this story, which is still full of mysteries. Can't wait for the next chapter!