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August 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Okay hmm construdtive criticism...perhaps "dumping his load on himself" is a bit icky, too rough. It would be nice if you could think of something that sounds more plesant? I don't know how you feel but some people like to outright say vulgar worse when writing lemons but I think it sounds better if for example they write member instead of dick. *Sure this is the most embarassing advice you will ever get*
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August 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love it so far. I can't wait to read what happens next!!! please let me know when your going to post another chapter!!!
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August 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Love it! Excellent story
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I rp so much, so I really don't mind the back and forth format, it runs smoothly enough. Meanie for that cliff hanger! I love this story though so thanks to both of you!
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG LOVE IT!!!! I'm sooo happy you're making it a MPreg I LOVE them ;) This story is going well so far. And you updated so fast!! Thank you!!!
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
An another cliffy!!! Wow you update so fast!!! I totally love it!!!! Thank you so much for this wonderful chappie!!!! I really don't like this Sajni guy!!! Hope he gets a beating from Brice for hurting his precious!!! I can't wait for the next chappie of this great story!!! See you again soon!!!
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT!! Seriously, this is fantastic. You're writing is incredible and I love the way you're portraying the attraction between the two!! I cant wait for the next chapter, Brice better get there in time!!!
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Love this story, and the fast updates.Keep the good work ^^
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this kind of wolf-plot. Nice beginning here. Can't wait to read more! :*
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August 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm really enjoying this so far - I've been obsessed with werewolf fics lately, so thanks for aiding my addiction ;) Add mpreg to that and you've made me happy!
I just have one suggestion - I know you've said it's roleplay, and a lot of times that's done via IM or something similar - it would probably be a good idea for one (or both - two sets of eyes are better than one!) to do a spell/grammar check in Word before posting. It's not terrible (I've seen MUCH worse!) but there are errors that could be caught by that ('hear' instead of 'here' for example)
I just have one suggestion - I know you've said it's roleplay, and a lot of times that's done via IM or something similar - it would probably be a good idea for one (or both - two sets of eyes are better than one!) to do a spell/grammar check in Word before posting. It's not terrible (I've seen MUCH worse!) but there are errors that could be caught by that ('hear' instead of 'here' for example)