rate_review Reviews

That was a wonderful story!!! I read it and I really loved it! The ending was very sweet and heartwarming. I liked your characters alot, the boys were really nice. The part on the bus was kinda confusing, I didnt really get how it developed the story. Other than that Amazing Story!!!
Hope to see another one soon!

A short word of advice, you might want to split the big paragraphs you have there into smaller ones. As they are now, they're very hard to read through and people will get discouraged from reading your story. Try to remember that dialogue lines should mark the beginning of a new paragraph (among others). Oh, an three first sentences, you might want to join them because as they are now, they simply look odd.