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for Their Favorite Babysitter

by DarthGnosis81985

schedule August 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Not bad at all. I like how you describe the feelings from the babysitter's perspective; I wonder if you could give a bit more insight into what the boys are feeling? A decent buildup, amusingly handled details of their relative gaps in experience. Not terribly sure about the language of the "cunny," but that could just be preference. Keep working, please!
schedule July 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
uy bueno, excelente, ana maria