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so, I don't normally make a habit of reviewing these stories because I am very picky with grammar and spelling, but two things about this story just really seemed to annoy me a bit. and I'm going to preface these two complaints by saying that they are little things, but, unfortunately, it's the little details that make good stories the great stories.

first of all, a full back tattoo doesn't take two to three hours. it takes HOURS. particularly the color and shading that you mention in a story. it does not matter how good the tattooist is. and, honestly, the better the tattooist is, the longer he is going to take because he (or she) is going to take time to make sure it is done properly. I got a tattoo that covers a third of my back and it took, altogether, close to seven hours to do (which was done in 2.5 to 3 hour periods to keep me from slapping the sh*t outta the tattooist for hurting my spine). most people don't do a full 7 hour tattoo unless they've had something to drink to dull the pain, particularly on the back.

secondly, you may want to check your numbers because gentle was one month premature with her little baby. again, I realize it's just a little thing, but in a tribe such as that, a premie isn't going to be nearly as healthy as you make the baby out to be, particularly if it's a full month early.

other than that, I love the story. I anxiously await each of your updates. it's well written and it appears to have gone a lot further than you originally intended, which is awesome too. in response to your question, I would rape heavenly hunter, and kill alejandro and dump his body just so I could have heavenly hunter all to myself.

don't take these criticisms too seriously. they are just little things that, if fixed, would make the story that much more believable and realistic, and would, overall, make it a better read

Well, well, well, HH becomes a daddy! Poor Alejandro is so jealous!

And HH and Alejandro's souls have been crossing paths throughout history. How romantic! :)

I really love the story of HH and Alejandro! Although I also love your original story, I find this one fascinating. Too bad you can't continue with it. Maybe in a sequel....

I really like the story with Alejandro and Heavenly Hunter...although it is kinda weird that Alejandro doesn't get to be called by his name, but the new baby gets to. Oh well. What discovery does Justin make?! I wanna know!

Ohh, Alejandro got in trouble! Good thing he wasn't cut or anything, that would have sucked even more than getting his hair cut.

Ha, Bone Dancer!!!! lol Love that name! :)

This story about Alejandro and HH is so very fascinating! I was devouring every word!

I can't wait to read more! What an awesome imagination!

I love this story. It is cute and suspenseful. Plus there is tons of great hot sex. I love the sex scenes with Alex especially. The random past life stuff it getting really interesting. But where does Justin fit into all of it? It kinda sucks that he would get the short end of the stick just because he doesn't relate to Alex in a past life. What are Justin and Carlos going to do about the murder plan? How are they going to do it? What if it goes wrong and someone(important) gets hurt? Is is bad of me to want someone to try to get(have sex with) Alex, who Alex absolutely doesn't want? A rape scene would definitely put the murder plans into motion. Please update more!

Wow, good for Carlos for sticking up for himself and not showing his brother his fear of him. :)

I still don't trust Miguel and when he finds out (I have no doubt he will find out) what Carlos is doing to get so much money, he is NOT going to be pleased.

Looking forward to his and Justin's move in day; that should be interesting, seeing them all living together. Someone is gonna get hurt and I hope it's not Alex. Well, I don't want any of them to get hurt, but especially Alex.

Shit; it's not bad enough trying to kill ONE person; now Justin and Carlos are trying to kill TWO!

Great chapter! I loved the date between Carlos and Alex. Carlos is so cute; he just wants to make Alex happy.

I'm not sure how it's gonna pan out with the three of them living together. Sure the sex'll be hot, but what about the emotions and feelings? Carlos and Justin both love Alex and Alex loves the both of them. What happens when one thinks Alex loves them more? What happens when that green monster jealousy comes around? It won't be pretty.

Anyway, awesome chapter as alwasy fused! Looking forward to the next big job! :)

Romantic picnic~ awh
Raoul needs to get killed ugh D;

Omg, Rossini has a spawn!!!! The Spawn of Rossini! Shit, run Alex, run!!!! :(

Man, those pimps sure are nasty; especially Terran, omg, she has her old employees killed? Shit, what's Alex gotten himself into? Actually it's his father that did it. Alex wouldn't be in this mess sucking up to Rossini if it weren't for his father's gambling debts.

I also feel bad for Justin; his parents are having a fit since he's staying local for Alex. I just hope they don't take their anger and disappointment out on Alex.

Awesome chapter as usual! Looking forward to Alex and Carlos's date! Although personally, I want to see Alex with Justin. :)