rate_review Reviews

I find the summary to your story very attention grabbing, interesting. It's something that made me scroll down the page, and then after some clicking, come back to it. However, when I did actually click on it I was disappointed. I find stories with little or no format to be difficult to read. It's easy to lose your place amidst all the text and it's just a bit bothersome. Sentence after sentence after sentence with few breaks. So while I'm definitely not one to be handing out advice on writing, I just wanted to mention the reason I'm not reading your story. But I did browse through a bit, and you write well from what I can see.

oh c'mon admit it, that's not where his eyes really dropped to, right?
;))