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for It's Hard to See This as a Bad Idea

by Lupine8

person Lupine8
schedule January 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the review.

I'll admit, it's the first thing I have written in a very long time, story-wise. May I ask what makes in awkward? Also, in what ways my writing is sub par.

Yeah, I get a lot of people hating on Open Relationships, worry not. I'm just a big fan of people doing what works for them.
person Zak
schedule November 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well, that was awkward. The writing was alright, needs some work, but generally a lot of potential in your descriptive abilities. It sorta makes me way too curious about your personal life- but maybe thats the sign of a good story?

Always thought "open relationships" were way too awkward of a concept, since if there are two things human beings have in abundince it's jealiousy and guilt. Don't get me wrong, not the religious type looking to impose belie, just sayin. Also- ryan seems tobe the nice guy, so I'll cheer for him. I'm such a square but I'm totally hoping for this to end with everyone talking things out with each other and all getting along. And maybe a couple sex scenes of course to keep the chapter interesting.

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