rate_review Reviews

Eddie sounds a bit bipolar- beating Adrian up one minute then confessing his love the next XP Nice story :)

Ha! They missed dinner; I'm sure it was well worth it!!

Great story; too bad you're not continuing with it. I did see a couple of errors, no biggies: whimp is wimp, when Eddie was describing the kiss, and Ade's lips, he said their naturally perfect, it should be they're naturally perfect. Also, I noticed throughout the story, that at the end of the sentence, most of the time you have commas instead of periods.

Anyway, enough of the critique; it was a great story and I really enjoyed reading it!