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April 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I confess! I have been reading the Syndicate and I have not left a review as yet. I love the story so far. Keep up the good work.
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August 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe you left it like that! You evil person you!
Now you better hurry up and update so I can find out what happened to Chase!
Now you better hurry up and update so I can find out what happened to Chase!
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July 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Jesus Christ! Just when I'm feeling sorry for that bastard Jack, he goes and does that to poor Eian (how do you pronounce his name btw? Is it like Ian?). I can understand about the Syndicate and how he's supposed to act w/his "servant", but shouldn't he show him some respect at least when they're alone?
Great chapter; I'm sure Marko would treat Eian better. Or is it Eain? Sorry!
Great chapter; I'm sure Marko would treat Eian better. Or is it Eain? Sorry!
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July 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm, after Jack and Marko left the "meeting" w/o having any fun, and they reached Jack's penthouse, my perverted mind thought they'd have some fun w/Eion or is it Eian? Sorry. Anyway, none of that either! Oh well, one could only hope for the next chapter.....j/k!!!
Looking forward to the next update!
Looking forward to the next update!
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June 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter. Jack actually has feelings! Who would have thought?
I noticed two errors: toilette should be toilet and 15 minutes should be written out Fifteen minutes because it's the start of a sentence. Actually, I think I was taught (hundreds of years ago, mind you), to write out the number rather than use the numerals.
Anyway, good chapter; looking forward to the next one!
I noticed two errors: toilette should be toilet and 15 minutes should be written out Fifteen minutes because it's the start of a sentence. Actually, I think I was taught (hundreds of years ago, mind you), to write out the number rather than use the numerals.
Anyway, good chapter; looking forward to the next one!
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June 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Reading this again was just as good as the first time! hahah
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June 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Whew! Thank God they let those kids go!
Good chapter; very suspensful!
Good chapter; very suspensful!
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June 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, it seems like Marko has a little crush on Jack. At least that's what I was read in the scene where he thought Jack was sleeping. I also got the feeling that he liked Jack in the original chapter of the story.
Anyway, looking foward to the next chapter!
Anyway, looking foward to the next chapter!
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June 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm, shouldn't Clover Reef be updating her story right about now????? J/K!
Ok, I am a little confused; this is the LAST chapter, right? I thought I read it before, but didn't notice any chaptes before it.
Yes, deleting the bold is so much easier to read. Good idea on the reviewer for mentioning it.
Anyway great job and I'm looking foward to the next update!
Ok, I am a little confused; this is the LAST chapter, right? I thought I read it before, but didn't notice any chaptes before it.
Yes, deleting the bold is so much easier to read. Good idea on the reviewer for mentioning it.
Anyway great job and I'm looking foward to the next update!
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June 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You certainly have a way with words. Your use of language is almost poetic without being too distracting. It makes reading this very enjoyable and paints a pretty picture.
The plot seems very interesting. I haven't seen many organized crime ring stories, so this is a nice breath of fresh air. I have a soft spot for androgynes, so Eian... or whatever his name is... certainly caught my attention. I'd love to learn more about Jack too and his -what I'm assuming is- his troubled past. Overall, good job!
-Chloe
The plot seems very interesting. I haven't seen many organized crime ring stories, so this is a nice breath of fresh air. I have a soft spot for androgynes, so Eian... or whatever his name is... certainly caught my attention. I'd love to learn more about Jack too and his -what I'm assuming is- his troubled past. Overall, good job!
-Chloe