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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed the story. It was lighthearted and fun. Thanks for taking the time to post b/c I know you have a life.
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Awe that was sad!!! Poor ash!!! I'm going to kill Eli if he doesn't go to the dam clearing the next night!!!! Well with that said great chappie ^^ Hope to see you again tomorrow!!! I can't wait to see what happens!!!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
if anybody feels eli is 'retarded' then simple: DONT READ IT don’t sit at your computer and say nasty things about peoples work. i understand why eli is so naive have you ever heard of being sheltered? even in these modern times some parents have their kids wrapped in a bubble. when i was in high school back in 06 i met a guy who didn’t know what oral sex was, who believed kissing should only be done with someone you’re in love with, & who was raised without knowing a thing about sex except that you do it when you’re married to make babies.
eli seems 'retarded' and doesn’t know much about the world because his mother kept him apart from other wolves and only taught him the important things in life. understanding sexual relationships isn’t essential when you live with just your mom in an isolated place. did she think eli would have a mate by his first full moon when he'd been raised with 0 male contact? obviously not or she would have said something about it sooner. eli doesn’t act innocent he IS innocent he has no clue about what goes on in the outside world so if he seems 'retarded' its because he genuinely doesn’t know. & btw good job demeaning a whole group of people just because you don’t like a story. sorry if that felt like a personal attack but I just don’t like it when people flame a story or say derogatory things when it can all be avoided by clicking the back arrow or the red X on the corner.
eli seems 'retarded' and doesn’t know much about the world because his mother kept him apart from other wolves and only taught him the important things in life. understanding sexual relationships isn’t essential when you live with just your mom in an isolated place. did she think eli would have a mate by his first full moon when he'd been raised with 0 male contact? obviously not or she would have said something about it sooner. eli doesn’t act innocent he IS innocent he has no clue about what goes on in the outside world so if he seems 'retarded' its because he genuinely doesn’t know. & btw good job demeaning a whole group of people just because you don’t like a story. sorry if that felt like a personal attack but I just don’t like it when people flame a story or say derogatory things when it can all be avoided by clicking the back arrow or the red X on the corner.
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
now for review #2
normally i just skip over stories that have ‘wolf’, ‘pack’, ‘were’, ‘vampire’, ‘dragon’ or words of that nature but something made me want to click on your story & i’m glad i did. i can confidently say that your story is one of the top five i’ve EVER read on this site. i love how you update frequently & even though your chapters are short it doesn’t feel rushed or like you just ran out of ideas and decided to post anyway. i check in the morning, on my lunch break, & when i get home for your story and few leave stories leave me doing that. i love love LOVE this story and i hope you don’t let a flame stop you from sharing this wonderful story with us. keep up the good work i will recommend this story to everyone i know. btw i also read your other story Bridges and i’ve fallen in love with your work. i hope you update that one soon too! :] hopefully these reviews make up for the fact that I haven’t reviewed at all. >__<
a little afterthought, I feel like mama raised eli apart from other wolves because she herself got her heart broken and doesn’t want eli to go through that pain. forgive me if my assumption is wrong but that’s what i’m getting from her character.
normally i just skip over stories that have ‘wolf’, ‘pack’, ‘were’, ‘vampire’, ‘dragon’ or words of that nature but something made me want to click on your story & i’m glad i did. i can confidently say that your story is one of the top five i’ve EVER read on this site. i love how you update frequently & even though your chapters are short it doesn’t feel rushed or like you just ran out of ideas and decided to post anyway. i check in the morning, on my lunch break, & when i get home for your story and few leave stories leave me doing that. i love love LOVE this story and i hope you don’t let a flame stop you from sharing this wonderful story with us. keep up the good work i will recommend this story to everyone i know. btw i also read your other story Bridges and i’ve fallen in love with your work. i hope you update that one soon too! :] hopefully these reviews make up for the fact that I haven’t reviewed at all. >__<
a little afterthought, I feel like mama raised eli apart from other wolves because she herself got her heart broken and doesn’t want eli to go through that pain. forgive me if my assumption is wrong but that’s what i’m getting from her character.
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 4.
2 weeks kid. mama is counting down the days to her goodbye with her pup.
Eli, you're gonna be snatched away, well, taken away.
hmmm~~~ this story has a very interesting feel to it... like im watching an old movie, except, its not a colour problem... it's like everything is waiting and waiting to burst out ripe on the night of the full moon.
2 weeks kid. mama is counting down the days to her goodbye with her pup.
Eli, you're gonna be snatched away, well, taken away.
hmmm~~~ this story has a very interesting feel to it... like im watching an old movie, except, its not a colour problem... it's like everything is waiting and waiting to burst out ripe on the night of the full moon.
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 5
yes!!! the chapters are short! (thou, it's not that bad. but its still short )
and GAAAAAAAAH! Ashton better quickly claim Eli before he get's snatched away by some other wolf. what with Eli being sooo 'RIPE' and all... XD
Must they really wait for the full moon? that other guy didn't seem to care about waiting.
more please? *A*
yes!!! the chapters are short! (thou, it's not that bad. but its still short )
and GAAAAAAAAH! Ashton better quickly claim Eli before he get's snatched away by some other wolf. what with Eli being sooo 'RIPE' and all... XD
Must they really wait for the full moon? that other guy didn't seem to care about waiting.
more please? *A*
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Poor Eli, but hes sure dumb, lets take a nap in the woods...his wolf is going to have to work hard to protect his naive lil butt
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
That was great!!! I don't think the angst scene was bad, I really liked it!!!! And then Ashton the knight in shining armor coming to his rescue!!! Great!!! See you again soon!!
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
this is a really interesting story and i'm glad i found it can't wait to read more.
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June 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok I really hope I don't come off as a hater or something.. but although I do like the story Eli just feels to much like a 6 year old girl to me(no offense) just the way he acts all..retarded? not innocent anymore but just...it's (seriously I don't mean to come off as a bitch) I keep reading the next chapter because the story does have potential... but yeah just wanted to put my opinion out there...it's the way Eli acts..just rubs me the wrong way... before you said he was 18 I seriously thought this was a prologue with him being 6 or something... yeah ok shutting up now...