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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 6
why don't you like the second half of the chapter?
i just find that, in the second half, it shows just how innocent and naive Eli truly is.
It makes me wonder, if he knows, what he's gotten himself into, with the 'mating' thing... I have a feeling he has no idea what's going to happen...
and I'm also surprised, that Mama was surprised with what Ashton proposed, to run that it. Shouldn't mama know this is bound to happen? xD?
why don't you like the second half of the chapter?
i just find that, in the second half, it shows just how innocent and naive Eli truly is.
It makes me wonder, if he knows, what he's gotten himself into, with the 'mating' thing... I have a feeling he has no idea what's going to happen...
and I'm also surprised, that Mama was surprised with what Ashton proposed, to run that it. Shouldn't mama know this is bound to happen? xD?
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
chap 7
uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurrr....... this didn't end of very nicely.
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thou. i have a feeling that eli will go, and meet ash. and 'run'...
ASHTON! you better treat Eli nicely!!!
uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurrr....... this didn't end of very nicely.
D:
thou. i have a feeling that eli will go, and meet ash. and 'run'...
ASHTON! you better treat Eli nicely!!!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
oh wow! I totally loved it...the smex was hot!! I liked how Ashton gave chase to Eli! I was glad to see Eli come to Ashton...I did like the last part of the ending...when Ashton said lets start on working on making pups...so cute!
I can't wait for the second part!!
I can't wait for the second part!!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
So much confusion of the heart!! I like it update soon!!!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I THINK the sex was perfect for this short story and its style like when you read a non-smut book but theres sex in it but it not super graphic it was just enough. i also liked how the semi sendcond sex scaen was simply done by a singal word very nice :) and i cant wait for the second part to come out :P
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
awesome job cant wait to read the second half. ^_^ update soon
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Aww - So happy! Melting into my chair at work with a big smile on my face. I loved their mating scene. Very well done. Mama must be very happy too. I love this couple. I can't wait for part 2. Good job Angie and thanks for finishing the story. A lot of AFF writers write well but they never finish the story. Cheers to you.
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
the first part was fantastic!!! I so can't wait to see the puppys they are going to make ^^ I hope we will see the second part up soon!!! See you again!!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
owwww so cute !!
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June 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Such a cute story and I really like where it is going....can't wait for the next chapter.