rate_review Reviews

Nice turn of events. glad to know what the secret is. I look forward to more soon. XD

Yay! They made up :-) They are such a cute couple. I love the incubus idea. I can't wait for the next chapter.

So...Derrick WAS really in Zeil's dream? But why did he even mention Shane? That was pretty stupid! Especially if he wants to get into Zeil's pants! lol

Still noticed a few errors; off the top of my head, they were, dinning room, is dining, cant is can't. One or two more I don't remember. Anyway, no big deal, just wanted to let you know in case you wanted to go back and edit it. I noticed you did that w/the first chapter!

Anyway....can't wait to read more; I'm really enjoying the story!

Now I am all curious about what Derrick could be. Is he an alien or some kind of supernatural creature? I think it was so cute of Zeil to kiss Derrick like that. The sparks are flying between the two boys. I love the mystery of Derricks identity. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Yeah, I really like this story, so I'll still read it! I'm too curious about Derrick's secret!!!! Yeah, and why was he making out w/Shane???? This is definitely sending Zeil the wrong message! lol Zeil seems to really like Derrick and Derrick acts so sweet w/Zeil; I can see where Zeil would be really jealous!

I'm looking forward to to the next chapter!

I really like chapter two. It seems Derrick is going to use the tactic of making Zeil jealous. I hope the plan doesn't backfire since Zeil was already interested in Derrick. I am surprised Shane allowed things to go so far. I am really enjoying the story.

This is cute! Definitely love the popsicle scene and how it turned out that way. XD Hehe!

Very cute. I am looking forward to reading more. I wonder what else Derrick can trick Zeil into doing.

OMG, this ia great! I love it so far. In your summary, you mention that Derrick is strange somehow. You're not going to ruin this good story and make him a vampire or some weird non-human, are you? I'm hoping this will be a normal, human story.

I did notice a few errors I'll point out if you were planning on going back and editing. Some authors do that. Anyway, here they are: serfacing is surfacing, gentley is gently, perpouse is purpose, and latter is ladder.

I really love this story; the character descriptions are great, the dialogue between the characters flows really smoothly, it has humor; great story all together! I can't wait for the next chapter!