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If it has something relevant, write about the celebration. Otherwise I trust your judgment as a writer to cut out filler scenes.

Very nice story so far. I love how realistic this story is, and how they didn't fall madly in love with one another. I can't wait to see how things play out.

Keep writing,
Sayden Emery

skip the celebration! just get to The part were keil and grael see each other again!!!! >....<

I really enjoyed your story, it's one of the best I've read in a long time.

Are you still taking challenges? If so, I have one for you.

A man who is in love with his reflection (A total rip off of Narcissus). Anyway, I thought that it would be a good story to have his reflection come to life and be just as enamored with him. It's a good excuse for a clone/twincest kind of story. You can make the story in any time, era, or alternate universe you like, even the actual plot is yours to create, my only request be that the man has to have hair that is long, past his behind, and a beautiful strawberry blonde. Oh, and sky blue eyes, too.

chapter 7. woot! i wanna hear about the celebration!!! me! me! -jumps up and down, waves hands in the air frantically- thanks for the update! i would love to see Grael again.

u should put in the celebration. if nothing else, at least keil deserves to rub it in the faces of the rest of the tribe

Yay Keil for proving all those assholes wrong! lolz I love this chapter, please post the dinner I think it would be funny. :] ~Bliss

I am glad that Keil passed his test. It looks like he will become very good at finding his way in the woods in no time at all. I am fine with skipping the celebrations. Especially since he is the new chief's brother, I hope that no one will try to force him to submit anymore. I hope we get to see what is going on with Grael soon.

nah! if nothing that pertains to the story happens then no, but you could briefly mention it, about what it was like and his tribe treated him. like i said in my last review, i LOVE IT! I keep imagining how the two will meet again. I can't wait!

I'm liking this story so far. While I do feel bad for Keil and his predicament in the past, I'm happy that he was finally able to prove himself. As for a celebration chapter, I would include one, but if the flow does not support it, then you don't have to.

Adding to my previous post, of course I would love to see a Keil/Grael reunion. There was definately an unseen (to them) connection. I hope Keil or Grael realize this and do something about it :)