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Sounds like a wonderful story, hope you update! :D

More please!!! I like it so far. Your a great writer even if it is just for fun. Jason's a dick. lol My last bf was like him.

Something about your summaries are just... catchy.
Was reading the summary, and decided to give this ficcy a try, even before I knew it was YOU *points finger accusingly* just what mayhem are you starting now Lori? (*whispers to self* I knew it! these people with such a name are always up to something...)

So anyway~ ^______________^

What' with the tittle? Why's Jason's name in it, when I foresee that he won't be with the main character 'Mark' much longer... or not? Thou Jason's is possessive to the point of ridiculousness and its honestly an unhealthy obsession... I wonder... is he the abusive type? Your summary doesn't give any warnings of such things. so... *shrugs*
But hmmmmmmmmmm~~~ A high-school drop out. Working at Mac.Doogles. *snickers*. McDoogles. heh.hehehehhehehheehe! BWAAAGAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHHA~!!!!! What the heck man!?
I don't think you'd get into any copyright trouble if you just said "McDonalds" you know! In fact, shouldn't they be happy, since you'd be helping promote them? XD

Hehehe~ okay okay.
Catch ya laters huh~

And boy. You sure are one busy woman. What with so many projects running on the same time.
You go girl~ All the best with that Flaming update!


- nekoii

this is really good story & i hope to see more it soon! however the begining reminded me a little of a story i used to love reading a while back called the Secret Life of Bee because they both took place at a McDougal's either way good job and i hope things dont end up too similar.

I feel this it a good start to a wonderfully cute story. I can totally see Simon running to his rescue from Jason's harshness. Keep it up and can't wait to see what happens!

More!lol loving it!

Oh, I'm so going to spend time telling you how much I dislike Jason, aren't I? Great start and I can't wait to see the sparks fly when Jason gets his first look at Simon.

Oh oh oh, me likey! After only one chapter I already know I'm going to enjoy this story immensely. It has been a while I've had the pleasure to indulge in a hot love triangle. Yup, I have a very good feeling about this story. I like it how Mark isn't a complete pushover when Jason tells him to do something. It's good that he still has his own mind and hopefully Simon comes to the rescue before Jason has a chance to mold Mark into his little househusbandslave.

I definitely want to see what's going to happen next. Your characters always just blow my mind away, they are all that brilliant. ;}

I for one would love to see more on this story. It sounds interesting.

Ahhh Mark, the poor guy. Seems he'd be better off w/o Jason. Jason seems so utterly controlling and possessive. Jason needs to get out more instead of being home on the compter and worrying about Mark. And why is it that it's not safe for Mark to go outside for lunch, in broad daylight?????

Anyway, the mystery man sounds yummy; can't wait to find out if he's gonna visit McDoogal's!