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chap 3
I'm really likeing this story so far ^-^ PLEASE UPDATE SOON I CAN'T WAIT TO READ WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

You have a great plot and I think that you are doing quite good but I would like a bit longer chapters and also a bit more descriptions of the surrounding scenes. Since you have introduced us to a new world, we need a bit more description to get the hang of it. Like, why are there healers?, what does there home look like?, is the main character's tribe a subgroup within the "royal" tribe? and so on; it is a lot to describe but perhaps just a hint of how they live in the village would suffice. One thing that I did'nt really grasped was why the main character was the heir, he is different but nethertheless he is to be the heir...? Just some things to think about:)

Great that you have divided the text into paragraphs, makes it a lot easier to read. Please continue, really like to see where this story is going!

I really like this so far!!! It reminds me a bit of prey and I love Prey!!!! Thanks a lot for posting!!! Hope to see you soon!!!

I like this so far~ It could use some mroe details and, of course I hope longer chapters.
I am eager to see what you can do I will be watching and waiting for more ^-^
Yours, Spicy

Plot looks interesting enough, but I just can't get through it. I think it would be better if you seperated you story into paragraphs, rather than just clump it together the way it is right now. Also if you could make chapters longer, I think more people would be interested in reading it (I know I certainly would!).

I like it

ooo sounds interesting! i cannot wait to read more :) if you could, please make sure the formatting is clear so that things don't run together ;)