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I think I'm gonna like this story. =] I like the way it's written and Jeremy is frickin hilarious. Keep posting and I'll keep reading and reviewing. =]

I think it's cute.
And I'd love to see how it develops.
More please :)

more please :)

Cheer Queer?!LOL,ROFL
As long as out CHeer Queer backs up sarcasm(mouth talk) with some serious love-hate attitude and the muscle power he was so..oh bragging about in chapter 1, you're on track and winning first place in your 1 person POV.
Btw.the cupcake thing threw me of for a while, cause it was really gay,and the jock accepting without insulting him at leas with one comment( I thought the jock was straight and slightly homophobic?!)
So, it wont be fun reading a story where the gay gay is just mouthy but when you touch him he goes down on you immediately and the jock is actually gay in closet( he already figured this out before the story started)who'll jump on the gay gay and admit"You may haven't noticed my name calling,fights, emotional turmoil because I had it before this story but I'm gay and in closet.And I love you."
Sooo, besides this whole cupcake turmoil, I thought you dropped your "I'm not cheering for you" line to early and that it did not have the appropriate effect(like a hammer hitting you in the head).
It should have been during the game, before the game, somewhere where there's an audience to be shocked and outrages at their interactions.
This is all my personal opinion, maybe I'm being to hard on you but even though I'm hard for your stories(Metaphoricly speaking of course, as a female person I can not produce such phsyical reaction) I just thought to warn you that you're digresing from the storyline you said you'll make.

I like it. I would probably do the sane thing if I were in Jeremey's situation. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Please email me when you update: narcoleptic86@gmail.com

YAY! You actually wrote it. I am liking the start so far. I like how Jeremy has spunk.I can't wait to see how and Luke get along. Luke doesn't seem like such a "jerk" so far. This is quite exciting. Please keep it up!

Love the story can't wait for more

I was pleased to see you add your new story, I like that Jeremy has a opinion and is not shy to share them. You have done very well in writing in the first person, as I sure it is difficult but it flows well. Good Job!
I look forward to your udates of this story and you others.

I like the first charapter... More soon please? :)