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HAHAHAHAH!!!!!! The kind of 12 year old that doesn't do fucking shit!!!!! lol And my 17 yr. old and 15 yr. old never saw the inside of a mop....I could go on and on; the list is endless!


Ok, please clone your 7 yr. old and Hannah; I'll take one of each!

I was so happy, when I was finished reading the second chapter, you already added a third!

I was a little confused tho; in the second chapter Dean was asking Landon why he doesn't drink, but when he went on his date, he drank wine. I don't get it.

I feel really bad for Landon; here he was feeling really good about his date and now his cover is blown. (no pun intended)
And why was Dean getting all in his face? I think Dean is jealous of Landon; jealous that he might have found someone. Dean must be so lonely, so confused, not understanding why his wife left him and her kids. He's come to depend on Landon so much; depend on him for everything. Oh, I was wondering, does Dean just leave Landon money for whatever he needs for the girls and himself? B/C Landon doesn't have a job, right? Anyway, Dean must feel threatened that if Landon really likes this guy, he'll be spending more and more time w/him and not be there for Dean and his nieces.

I feel bad for both of them.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Enjoy your movie night!!!

Wow. I can't wait to see where you go with this one. It seems pretty interesting and I just want to read it all right away! Good luck!

WoW... I love it.. write more.. I want to see where your going with this... a good start.. I already bookmark this story.. don't give up <3

Very nice. Please continue and keep up the good work

I like it a lot! I didn't notice any grammar problems but then again, I can't spell to save my life. Wonderful chapter, please update as soon as you can!

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Well written, not a single error I could see that I noticed. It was nice and long. I like the characters. I appreaciate it's not just a teasier but the first chapter really said a lot. I like the style of writing, the size of paragraphs. I will definatly continue to follow this story.

Loved it! Looking forward to more Dean/Landon interactions ^_^

Please email me when you update: narcoleptic86@gmail.com

Very nice. I liked it. Please keep going. The characters were wonderful, as was the pacing, and the grammar was good. As for a title...how about The Road of Responsibilities?

I think was a really good start! I like the characters so far and the pacing is excellent. I can't wait for the next update!